All Comments on 'Brooke Ch. 05'

Well written, but nothing new in this chapter, except the business of passing themselves off as married. Can Steven and Brooke continue this successfully during their college time? I can't recall without checking back if anyone knows their true relationship - the girl they saved, at the frat party, for example. The college must know. How will they handle it when the truth comes out. It's a strange thing: if they were simply gay sibs, especially girls, like those lesbian sisters, Tegan and Sara, starting to make a name in music, most people would accept them as unusual, but okay; but being brother and sister would cause most people to cast them out of society. It hardly makes sense. But Ch. 6 should wrap it up, Tom says.

Sorry to state in this comment but I am kind of disappointed in this continuing Chapter 5. I had waited long enough in anticipation that something "new" and more exciting wild scenes would perhaps come forth but instead still nothing...oh well, maybe in Chapter 6 things would turn heated up somewhat?...just hoping...

I liked this transition chapter its building the story up well

It's just the right way you are going with the story. You are not rushing it and I like that you hinted that their parents may or may not know what's going on between them. I hope you continue and maybe throw in a few more surprises.

Chapter 6, the final chapter in this series, has been submitted. Any ideas for another story? TW

Yes! I've been dying for him to get inside that tight, muscular, field hockey ass of hers!! I had to stop reading and jump over to google images and look at field hockey girls to have a few good vivid images for this scene! ;)

i thought she said he was her first? how did she know it hurt in her ass if he didn't go slow?