All Comments on 'Brooke Claims Her Prize Pt. 03'

Really stupid

What trash and nonsense story.

Waste of time reading this garbage.

Only a brain sick one for brain sick ones!!

Cuck haters are just to stupid to understand real love and sex so they come here and post silly little hate comments to make them feel better.

CUCKS are just too stupid to understand real love and sex so they come here and post silly little DUMB comments to make them feel NORMAL.

Just hit bottom

As soon as I saw it was written in present tense, I quit. Just a dumb choice.

One constructive comment, about tense. I struggle with that issue and will work on finding the bast tense for writing.

As for the other comments. As "sick" or "mentally ill" as i must be to write these stories, what does it say about people that read something that they know they are going to hate, but keep reading? Then they take the time to leave a a barely literate, hate filled comment. I'd love to be a fly on the wall at their dinner table. Lighten up chaps, smoke some weed or eat some chocolate cake. It might help you stop the self-loathing just a bit.

Just a thought. Obviously do what you want, write what you want, be what you want. No one here could care less.

just another day at the asylum.

another cocksucking wimpy FAGGOT posting dumb cuck SHIT.

This is a weird mix of elements, I like that it grows from a longterm phone sex connection, one of my friends used her phone sex clients to become a professional domiatrix, weirdly intimate relationship can develop between strangers. The element of placing all the blame for the cruelty of betraying the wife on Brooke is probably similar to the logic that allows people to be comfortable as adulterers. The sex is not so well written nor the writing so good as to explain the impact both positive , for me, and so vocally negative for other posters. Something very good here that deserves encouragement, keep writing this story, but expect to have to totally rewrite it later. Russ.

Thansk for the feedback Russ. I generally ignore the troll comments. I am definitely looking for feedback on my writing style and how I can make it better. I recognize that i could make it more easy to read, more engaging, and that I could probably make it feel more realistic. The goal is to make it read, like it feels in my head when i'm coming up with the ideas. I'll keep working on improvement. If part 4 is better than part 1, then i'm making progress. J

Good stuff. I'm a fan of the female sexual predator seducing the husband. Protagonist did seem to fall a bit too fast for my tastes and seems a little hard to relate to - there was no resistance on his part. Looking forward to the next chapter and how she warps him even more.

Nothing more needs to be said.

Good work. Looking forward to the implications of that Spade tattoo...