All Comments on 'Brown Eyes, Blue Smile'

Thats all you write.

You have joined the ranks of SAMX and his stories. Or perhaps you are him? either way you attempts at writing are pathetic.

I like your story very much please continue!!!

You should ignore the really non-constructive negative comments. Your story has a good start and needs to be continued.

why are people intent on being big arseholes after reading a story, do they not know where the return button is on their p/c. Or, actually not reading the story at all!! i actually like this story and hope there is more to come from the characters, longer chapters would be cool too??

THIS IS THE FIRST TIME I HAVE READ ONE OF YOUR STORIES I REALLY ENJOYED IT.

Good start! Minor typos but good story.

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please ignore the ignorant haters. they clearly have too much time on their hands. Now to your story.Her ex is clearly psycho and I don't know how I feel about Michelle yet.

but you should really try to find an editor. It seemed plodding in some parts and then rushed in others. You've got decent characters and with the crazy ex-boyfriend, there could be some good drama. Keep writing

Now we need to see where Shanice and Eric go. and when does the Ex come into play. Do they throw down or does the ex get Humiliated and Leave?

what about GF Michelle will she be Supportive or be the One telling Chris the Lies that led to the Break-Up?

Can't wait to read more