All Comments on 'Bryan's Song Ch. 01'

i loved it, great job.

Your writing is erotic without being "dirty."

Lojo

loved the story it is absolutely brilliant. Iook foward to reading more.

i was never one for erotic stories,, but damn that was hot,, very hot,, and very creative,,, great work!! :-) From singleguy31

Nice development but the original contact was a bit hard to believe.

very enjoyable read obviously written by a lady who both likes to recive and wrire about two adults enjoying sex

A good gripping story that wouldn't let me stopp till the end was reached. Very well done

Loved it! Great writing!!!

Within the first few paragraphs the protagonist accidently kills her husband. This is why I dont read alleged "erotica" written by women. Its always some melodramatic, emotionnally driven, and quite frankly CONFUSED drivel which is better suited for the Hallmark channel or any other female viewed varietal.

I read erotica to be turned on by both the personas of the characters, and the seduction/lust contained therein. Only a woman would start a fantasy/erotic story by murdering her husband. Thats not sexy. Just like Titanic - it ends with thousands of male corpses floating in the ocean; and women think this is 'romantic'? Its tripe, and not alluring or sexy.

You could have made the husband some philandering asshole, and the female lusted after someone else; Id balk. But starting the story with his murder is only in the realm of lustful fantasy IF your a delusional/twisted fu$k. Not...Exactly...A turn on.

Another give away that this is penned by a female, are the unnecessary, unnatractive details and nagging complaints:

"Went to the gym because Im FAT"

"Took a pill because Im SICK with allergies"

"Hubby left phone somewhere; it drives me MAD and now might cost me my life".

Women are $hit when it comes to the art of seduction; and lazy.