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AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Good premise but need an editor

The first person present tense really doesn't work here. You also switch between present and present progressive. Nice concept, but it needs some work

Larry52Larry52over 7 years ago
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Love this story, can but dream.

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Recently I have had no time or motivation for writing. Have to say sorry to them who likes them and also to them that don't like but still are reading them and telling how horrible they are. I am not writing mainstream fantasies so my writings are not for big groups of reader...