All Comments on 'Businessman and an Asian Maid'

This isn't a story, but merely a scene with nameless, faceless characters.

"The grind of business, of flights, of meetings all grind together into one after a while." - "Grind" twice in the same sentence. That's a no-no. "Meld" or "blur" might be better choices for the second.

"... each time taking the ones closer to where I'm standing.

I'm standing close to the table, a little deliberately" - "I'm standing" twice in a row. Another no-no.

"You feel the cold table against your nipples as I slide my shaft in." How do you know what she feels?

You really need to get rid of the *asterisks*. I hope this is helpful!

Quite good. Only minor brush-up needed. But this scene begs for a nice frame, i.e. either as a daydream fantasy or a starting scene in a longer story.

Best wishes

Appreciate the feedback - yes, it's more of a scene than a story. Next one will stretch it out a bit more (madam). And I'll drop the **s :-)