All Comments on 'Busted by Mom and Molly'

Good Story with great sex. You could use some improvements in grammar and a proof reader might help. The ending was a little simplistic, but this represented a good first effort. Consider expanding to a series.

Too clinical

You make too many mistakes in grammar and spelling. Every writer reads and re-reads the drafts before putting forward for publication. Also the word is 'Lay' not 'Lied'.

'Mum lay face up ...'

Too many errors/wrong words. Also too much like a narrative. Thanks for the effort though.

who next to join in this with them three

Withdraw this phony story. A waste of time.