All Comments on 'Busty Jessica's Pool Party'

Your story has some great parts. One that specifically stood out for me is when George is describing his oral fixation with Jessica's pussy. It is descriptive, detailed and made for a great read.

The one criticism I can come up with is that there was too much focus on too many characters. Perhaps, if some of the characters were static, and only a few dynamic it would have made for an easier read.

Other than that - good job.

wow, that seemed like quite the effort but oh so amusing. i do have to agree with the other comment though, that i got a bit overwhelmed by the main character list, but it was fun. three cheers for busty women!!!

And I thought the North Dallas pool parties were wild! Busty Jessica seems like quite the woman. Loved her final scene. Good luck in the contest.

This one didnt do it for me. I like a lot of your other stories, your descriptions are very visual and real. But this one was missing a bit of individual character wants and desires, they were all a bit stock and I couldn't commit as a reader or relate.

I always love reading your stories because they are so descriptive. Good luck in the contest.