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- Call of the Wild Ch. 01
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All Comments on 'Call of the Wild Ch. 01'
by hotmama72
- 27 Comments
canndalmost 13 years agoGreat start! I enjoyed it alot. She felt a bit too attracted to James which I can only assume was b/c of Daniel's scent on him. I loved how the fight with his friend went on for a while. I can foresee a problem when she realizes it was most likely his kind that killed her parents though. I look forward to more. Keep writing! There were a few mistakes that could be caught by an editor. Small things, but overall it was very well-written. Look forward to seeing all the ideas you have for the direction of the story.
lilwolfspiritalmost 13 years agoi can't wait to read more and find out why she reacted the way she did when she touched James and how she will deal with being thrust into a world she won't know. Keep up the good work.
Donna
am_sralmost 13 years agoexcelente, muy bien escrito y espero nuevos capitulos muy pronto: am_sr (ana maria)
foxy_lady76almost 13 years agonice beginning... cant wait until the next chapter to see what you have in store for Daniel and Emily.
Anonymousalmost 13 years agoI think that this was a great beginning. You have
me eagerly awaiting the next chapter. Please continue
and post soon!
Thanks, a new fan.
lormahoykyd2007almost 13 years agoI love the lycanthrope tales whether they be wolf or other. This is a great start. There are many great wolf writers here and I can't wait to see you join them.
Anonymousalmost 13 years agoI didn't really liked it. There is too much discussion of feelings and visions in the story. Wolf kin are the action type. Although many readers appreciated it, so if you like your style too - don't let my comment discourage you. And if you don't - let us (readers) judge the characters by their actions, not only words.
Silkydarktereasaalmost 13 years agoPlease do continue with the story. You are doing very well starting out. I would love to see you develope your story further. It takes alot of courage to throw yourself and your work out there for the first time and be opened up for critisims of all kinds. I would like to see where you take this story.
Tereasa
sm_obsessedalmost 13 years agoplease please please write some more. you had me hooked from the first paragraph!
WarDog143almost 13 years agoI like this and can't wait for more. You are off to a great start, I hope that you can keep this up.
Hale1almost 13 years agoAt the beginning you expressed concern that you might make errors in following folklore. This last year I've become a vampire/werewolf/elf junkie. My experience is that every author makes their own rules and writes their own story. The rules change with each author. I love your start, but I'd volunteer as an editor/proofreader for you. Its not bad, but I can improve it for you.
polgaranightalmost 13 years agoYou have done a great job with this story & it's characters. Cannot wait too read more.
Anonymousover 12 years agoGREAT START. I LIKE THE WAY YOU BROUGHT IT AROUND AND MAKE THE ALPHA CRAZY AFTER THE GIRL IN HIS DREAMS. PLEASE WRITE MORE AND FINISH IT. YOUR A GOOD WRITER AS ALL I CAN SEE.
Anonymousover 12 years agoMore...This really an interesting story and now I'm annoyed;please please ....
Alpha_Marmover 12 years agoVery solid start to a series.....let the magick continue pleeezzzzze.
Alpha_Marmover 12 years agoI understand life demands get in the way, but you have started something really good here. Keep going even if it is a paragraph at a time. Your foundation is good... well developed.. work it!!
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