All Comments on 'Camel Toe'

Riding a whirlwind, feee

Feeling the feeling

Sensing the joy

WW

Makes me wish I had a girl friend. I love reading your stuff and you know that. Thank you for another great story.

Jeff.

This was one of your best, Chloe. I'm a long-time fan, and have read all of your stories. This one was so sexy, and as usual your own personal observations while the action was taking place were delightful.

This was my first time reading any of your stories, and I really enjoyed this one. I plan to read more!

I'd give it a 6 if I could.

That was wildly erotic.

You've been busy. I read Hanky Panky first then this one. I managed to keep my load through the first one and lost it on this one. That one was good, but I liked this story more. The descriptions were better, and I definitely liked the female lead in this one a lot more. Well done, thanks.

If this story is somewhat autobiographical, then your "Zeke" is the luckiest guy on Earth!!!

P.S. Tiny titties rock!

I liked this one MUCH more than "Roses......."...Loved Kinky and her stream of consciousness prose.... Definitely lucky Zeke.... I hope THIS one wins the Valentine's Day contest, Chloe!!

You write Kinky's stream of consciousness so well and mix the interactions and sex with it so seamlessly. Congratulations, a very solid 5 stars!

Never saw the finish to one of your bests...RoundOut was it? Motorcycle story....you're good. Almost wish I had your input about my ramblings....PA, nurse, CORT, court reporter, soldier, farmer/rancher.......romantic.

This one's most enjoyable too..... turtlebiteus@gm

5 stars, all the best with the competition

Great story and great finish

Chloe, that is such a fantastic story - really erotic and so beautifully written. It really is a joy to ready your work. Thank you

Well told and very enjoyable.

is one of your best characters yet. Very well done. It is easy to see that your writing skills are far above average.

Great story, thank you. I like these happy ones better than the previous few, but you're a very good writer and I like them all.

LOVED IT.....and thank you for taking the time to write these and all your rest of your erotic, sexy, superb stories. The BEST!

...is a name worthy of a "Bond Girl!"

I got started at this one as well. You are addictive.

I love your Chinese references. The perfect Chinese woman body. The horny but conservative culture. The dress code with hotpants. They are irresitable and show off so well. The small language challanges like ‘Kinky’ and ‘Camel Toe’. Beautfully and superbly used in the story.

You are the best, Dearest Chloe... many kisses Geir

Read it all now. So sexy the way ‘you’ let it go and allow him your pussy.

The way you let him exploit ‘Camel Toe’ is priceless. Also the way you show her lust, that she is so ready. And, as said before, your ‘fucking’ description is so live it’s nearly like being him.

I love you. Geir

Sequel please

Gweilo, la! Zeke danced between her thighs, but you took us on a tour between Kinky's ears. Well written and entertaining.

Loved all the crazy thoughts & repetitions going through her head. Also enjoyed the cultural references. And the great sex!

I think many of us are coming to Literotica just to see if there's anything new by Chloe. Or to see if you're leaving to hit it big in the real world. You're that good.

I don't know if you take requests but I noticed you listed among your favorites the story "social studies". Would you consider writing something along these lines? From other things you've posted I got the impression you're not sympathetic to campus politics. That story was great for the surrender to repressed and shameful desires, or maybe just a hot girl fucking a house full of frat boys.

But really, whatever you write it will work on me, and probably everyone else.

I don't write request stories, but I'm totally open to suggestions and if they match with what I'm interested in writing ..... well, hey! So I read "Social Studies" and liked it. I've been thinking about doing a race-play white guy asian female story for a while so okay, I'll put that on the list.

Holy crap, Chloe. I may not be a good writer, but I’m what Harlan Ellison calls a “good reader.” Start submitting your work to zines and workshops and publishing houses if you haven’t already. You are the genuine article.

Well apologies for writing that you had social studies as a favorite, when you did not, as I discovered when I looked again. But thanks so much for replying to my message anyway!

Yes, it's not a request so much as a suggestion. You're the talent here, we're just the audience.

-Rob

yummy

Totally hot reading erotica written by a girl/lady/female whatever you prefer to be addressed as . And your style is engrossing. Start reading a Chloe story and you can't stop until the end , no matter how long . If they had a 6th star you would have got it for this story.

One of the best stories I’ve read. I could actually feel him inside her. She was totally fucked. Good job. I give you a 10 for this!

(Thanks for not being too wordy 👍)

Nice story. Kept my attention all the way through, although, I must say there was some redundancy that slowed the story. That aside, it was mighty fun and gave me a good deal of pleasure.

You are an excellent writer and as suggested you might want to consider writing for mainstream magazines. Which can be a lot of fun because it's kinda cool to see your name in print as well as the story, of course. I'm not sure its as much fun as a wonderful woman who loves to fuck, but still, you can't beat getting published!

Thanks for the story, and I'm looking forward to reading more of them.

Ted

Thanks Ted :) - if you take a look at my profile there's a link to my Amazon profile and to Facebook. I've now got one short story published in an anthology called "Sex and Sorcery 4" and a novel also available (the first part of a trilogy) called "Mistaken Identity" - and there's more on the way. They're both great :) (she says happily). And thanks again for the comment on this and on "Halloween in the Cemetery". Made my morning!

I had some trouble getting through the first paragraphs. I found the repeated use of la repetitious and felt it unnecessarily disturbed the flow of the story in the beginning. But I'm glad I stayed with it. I look forward to reading some of your other stories.

Beautiful Chloe,

How utterly captivating this story was to read and just fall in love with!

It seems so easy for you to tell but that is because your understanding of the

dream and incarnate reality of falling in love is.....It was triumphant, and carried me through the whole planting of love's seed in a welcoming garden.

I can not thank you enough for this precious piece of work!

Xiexie Nin!!

<3

I learned something from reading your story, Chloe, and that is that repetition can be a good erotic tool. Sometimes your writing is kind of Philip Glass, the same thing with a little variation, but that is actually a lot like sex. I am also learning that for women the plateau is often more exciting than the leap into space.

Please write more

Your words reminded me of my college days and heated moments with my mouth upon her sex through her pants. Now I know what may have been crossing her mind in those moments. Squirming and twisting side to side and then her hands pulling my head tighter almost to the point of not being able to breath. I miss those moments but they touched my heart and I still remember them now.

I have been spoiled by those moments and my Chinese GF. Want to be spoiled again and again. Thank you

"A long slow sliding spear of steely male hardness that thrusts into me and groaning with the exquisite pleasure of my surrender"

I think this whole piece is the best single expression of the female experience of physical sex I've ever read. I loved, also, the simplicity with which you introduced us to her as a slightly naive girl who didn't have excellent command of English - such delicate, spare character painting. Altogether a beautiful piece - best I've read for a very long time.

It's a vivid, spellbinding account, with such a wonderful cadence, almost like poetry. I was swept up completely. Ahhh, if only all *my* matings would be so memorable!

Yep

and funny, too. very funny...

this gweilo wants your ass...i'm not big enough to split it, though...

thanks for writing.

Since neither party had any form of Birth Control did Chloe get pregnant?

Oh, and she said she was using contraceptives.

I just recently discovered your work (lucky me!) and am poking about your bibliography without any particular pattern. I like the voice you’ve given Kinky. What spurred me to leave a note of praise was your meticulous, passionate description of Zeke’s initial penetration of Kinky and the way he works himself into her bit by bit. Much thanks from a grateful reader.

Great story!! I adore Asian women and have similar experiences.

Unbelievable!!! Erotica raised up to the level of fine art. I have never, ever read an extended description of deflowering that was more delightfully detailed or joyous. A transcendent experience for Kinky, and Zeke, and me the reader. The reader is not a voyeur in observation mode only but an active and conscious participant. That’s a rare and precious talent and gift. Most assuredly five stars!

I really like the way the increase in intensity and pace matches the story. Clever.

Another hot story! ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

I don’t know what La! means, but it’s incessant use is irritating beyond words. Maybe have been a good story, but as it’s rendered unreadable I’ll never know

What does "la" mean? In cantonese its a verbal emphasis, so you'd say "happy la" sort of like a verbal exclamation mark. You can add la at the end of pretty much anything to emphazize it. Okay la. Hungry la. Etc etc.

Hot story. if a bit wordy. I was amused by the "good girl can't say that."

My experience is not with city girls, but rather smaller town "Southren" women. No matter how salty or explicit their language is; they cannot say the "F" word in its literal sense. Instead they say the five greatest words in the English language (no, Shakespeare didn't write them), "I want you inside me."

Wonderfully hot!

Lovely story

Brings back a lot of memories. Forty years ago my first girlfriend in college was from Hong Kong. I'm a 6'2" gweilo, now with white hair. I was using the only available computer terminal to complete an assignment when I heard this musical feminine Cantonese voice behind me ask if any other terminals were available. I was smitten by the voice before I turned and saw her....

Really nice and erotic story. It made me hard !

I liked it a lot, but I have one question: was he huge? I couldn't be sure.

That's a nice story. Are all Hong Kong girls as hot as this, because I'm gonna look at them differently now.