All Comments on 'Camille's Dark Secret'

Keep it up

Thank you for posting and congratulations on your first story -- you write well. Just try to keep a grip on your paragraphs; some of them are a bit too long for easy reading.

Five stars and a favourite.

You just need an editor to fix the minor mistakes. For example, the word to describe Stephanie and Alex is "dominant", not "dominate." The first is an adjective. These second is a verb. I also want to see if he'll fuck his mom. Will there be more chapters? I hope so.

Whoop his ass.

Look forward to future chapters

I LIKE WHERE THIS IS GOING. LOVE THE STORY AND CONCEPT CONSIDERING MY STUDY OF THE CATHOLIC CHURCH, lol THE FUCKED UP CATHOLIC CHURCH IS RIDDLE WITH SICKNESS, THE DEPRAVED, BIZARRE AND SO MUCH SATAN WORSHIP. I DID A STUDY YEARS AGO AND ASKED ONE QUESTION, "ARE YOU A CHRISTIAN?" MOST OF THE ANSWERS WERE "NO I'M A CATHOLIC" THAT LIKED TO HAVE KILLED ME, hahaha NO WONDER THEY ARE GOING TO HELL. LOVED YOUR STORY!

For a first-time it is a good story. Keep it going.

Many spelling errors and or typos, but still a good read.

Perhaps a bit too much distraction with all his other partners, but from here on out, I expect that training his mother to accept being his slave will be the central..er..thrust.

It will add lots of spice if you can focus on Mother's thoughts, resistance, and final collapse of her will to resist. Ultimately, this story ought to be about the power exchange between them, not about his philandering ways.

Keep going. This has signs of being really good.

As a Daddy Dom, I enjoyed it thoroughly. I was kind of proof of the character for recognizing his error, LOL. I'd really like to read more of this story. I hope you connote the story line soon. I woke suggest that you talk to a fellow writer and ask them to proof read it for you though, some of the misspelled words and grammar issues made it hard read at times

The story premise is a good one. But it was a little hard to follow as there were numerous grammatical errors. You might like to either reread it after writing to correct it, or find someone to edit it. Hope to catch following chapters.

Really excellent dark domination story, marred by some grammatical/spelling errors. Find yourself an editor who can highlight any issues. Still worth five stars, with the opportunity for further development. Thank you, Cecilia.

more please, this story could go so much further, I really hope you take it there

Really great story of Domination and rape in the future we hope.

It seems your fans are all mentally degenerate criminals. She goes to the hospital and then to the police and he goes to jail for the next 20 years! What's supposed to be sexy or good about it? Raping your own mother and still finding it funny is probably only something for really crazy people!