All Comments on 'Camping Trip'

Loved it!

I hope you will continue writing about these two.

Fucking but not worred about getting knocked up

WELL WRITTEN , AND NO CHANCE OF HER GETTING KNOCKED UP. BECAUSE SHES ON THE PILL , TO CONTROL HER PERIOD .THIS STORY COULD GO ON AT LEAST TWO MORE CHAPTERS.THERE SO YOUNG YOU COULD WRITE A BOOK.. CALL IT BLUE LAGOON. OR PARADISE. SOUNDS ABOUT RIGHT.FOR A THIRD STORY YOU DID OK !! KEEP WRITING. LAROC OF AGES

For the most part, the technical aspects of the writing were fairly good. There were a few typos, and I also spotted a fragment disguised as a sentence: "His thin running shorts getting wet and hiding little of his own form." Your vocabulary suggests that you are capable of being a better writer than this effort demonstrates.

The buildup of the story was well paced but the sex seemed a bit rushed once it developed. The characters could have just frolicked nude the first day, kissed the second day, etc., finally leading to intercourse after several days.

This is fiction. However, in fiction, just as in real life, the anticipation makes the climax sweeter.

why would strangers take thier stuff? what kind of parents would see the kids walk back naked from skinny dipping and just go oh well? why would i not be suprised to find the parents have the bag?

Good start. Please write more

Very sweet. Please add some more chapters. Maybe the couple who stole their packs will re-enter the picture somewhere down the line? Just a thought. Please keep writing.

kind of boring and so many holes in the plot it looks like swiss cheese. poor background poor character development and no end all equal a waste of time AGAIN.

not a novel. The characters were a bit sketchy, but I could fill in the blanks. It was a very nice short story. Well written and a good read... enough to get me hard, and..

Keep it up.

but ending was not very good & verry not realistic at all.they come back naked and mom/dad don't really say why where bro/sis skinny dipping with each other anyway

Never knew of any woman who could have sex for the FIRST time with no pain...none. And have an orgasm, no less.....

Hmmm....my BS meter is sounding off.

When I was 16 my mother took my sister and I on a trip to the boundary waters of Canada, along with my mom’s new husband, and his three sons. My sister and I didn’t care much for the yuppie, better than you attitude that all three of our new step brothers seemed to express, so we took off on our own hikes together, away from everyone else. I won’t go into all the details, but that weekend my sister and I fucked each other seven times. Being two years younger than I, she was a virgin. A tight, bald little pussy and an ass that you could bounce a quarter off. Only after the third time did she let me cum in her, and it was unbelievable. Thank you for rekindling a very fond memory.

Great story,love how they were hamming it up in exaggeration so that the couple could hear them... Ignore the haters man just keep up the awesome work man

Awkward ending, too abrupt.

Love it when brother and sister fall in love. They were so sexy and hot.

It was great but all the bro killed it for me I speed read the rest