by hardwillingone
not bad.. a little weak on the dialogue but a good story line..
Surprised he lasted as long for getting it the first time with as much antisipation there was prior. Dialog during those moments are usually quite limited, if you've ever been under such circumstances. ('Never thought I'd live to see 25 thinking a jealous husband would catch me).I think you did a very good job and hope to read more of your stories.
This was a good story. I enjoyed all of it except the boy becoming arrogant about the power of his dick. Try writing such a story with the nale grateful to the woman for her gifts to him.
annony is an old ugly fat fag fool who should have died 20 years ago when his wife fucked the fleet and laughed in his face
"I began a slow steady rhythm pulling my cock almost all the way out before shoving all 8" back into her again."
You have never shoved 8" into anyone.
If the author was trying to portray a teen he failed miserably. But what i'm thinking is that this author never got any in his teens his ideas came from reading other stories, for your information a teen does not set parameters, a teen is greatful a milf will give him some that he will do anything that's asked of him. So the only advice I can give this author is to grow up and get some experience. no sense in reading the rest of the chapters if this author does not know what he's talking about.
BF's mom is ready: I see her juices flowing out of her and running down her legs
When an author doesn’t know the difference between site & sight, and has to add “at” at the end of a sentence when it’s not needed, I know he’s a low class with little education.
B
AWESOME story. SOOO exciting. Can't wait to see if Chris gets into Darcy's arse. Yummmm