- Incest/Taboo
- Campsite Ch. 01
- Comments
All Comments on 'Campsite Ch. 01'
by kawinch
- 27 Comments
sexymeupover 7 years agowas a good start, but, you had a few errors you may want to get someone to edit for you before you post, even the pros have someone edit for them,we all make mistakes, always good to have another set of eyes to check things out. i use spell check and have a friend edit for me.
Anonymousover 7 years agoPromising start, takes me back to when I was a teen and a similar incident with my cousin.
Yes more please !
worshipper622over 7 years agoStoryline is promising. Pleasantly surprised that you chose to start with the female's perspective. Please continue.
Anonymousover 7 years agoI would have liked a little more but, hopefully the next chapters will be a little longer. Great start so far.
Anonymousover 7 years agoThis was too little and too short. You could have at least left us with Derrick's post-ride experience and thoughts.
Anonymousover 7 years agoThis is not a cute way to say we want more.It wasway to short to publish.
Anonymousover 7 years agoYes, a funny point to stop the story ?? However, it has a lot of potential and should be a lot of fun when they get some alone time to talk about it, etc. Thanks.
Anonymousover 7 years agoSorry, but you need to write more before posting a story. That was barely a page and you need maybe two or more to really hold a reader attention. I liked it, but don't know if I'll bother coming back to look for more if they're going to be that short.
Anonymousover 7 years agoYou have a good story going ? Dont stop now....i want more
please continue.....thank you....
Turtle1952over 7 years agoPlease try not to keep us waiting too long for the rest of this story
SAV12over 5 years agoWELL TWO YEARS HAVE GONE BY AND YOU LEFT US IN THE AIR. WHAT GIVES WITH THE CONTINUING CHAPTERS KAWINCH.
Anonymousalmost 2 years agoIf you are going to get it hot, you need to be able to cool it off! Great story so far s keep writing.
Anonymousover 1 year ago2016 was the last year..... this is 2023 we need more to the story
PLEASE!!!!!!!!!
