All Comments on 'Can't Keep a Good Elf Down Ch. 04'

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whim_riderwhim_riderabout 13 years ago

Very creative story. I'm interested in seeing what other enhancements Psly has. Now for the constructive criticism, there are several repeated words and unremoved corrections throughout the story, such as the "lay laid" at the begnning of the last full paragraph.

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