by leann511
I guess I like this one better than the first one. I do hope you keep that Alice and Beth out of the rest of the story..
Paul
I love your stories! I get lost in them... completely. Thank you.
Liked the first chapter of your story however, you drifted away from Diana and Shirley being an item and brought others into the picture. This diminished the steamy sex that you could have developed as Shirley came more under the spell of Diana. Bringing others into the story line diminished the erotic part of a potentially great story.
Would have loved for you to have developed the story in such a way as to have Diana use her sexy body to gain gradual control over Shirley thus getting her to perform sexual acts in the park, theater, or other places where Shirley's submissive side may be caught by others.
Oh well!!