All Comments on 'Carnival Ch. 01'

Have to say very fun can't wait for the next part

I think the litmus test for a good story is whether it leaves you wondering what happens to the characters next. This one passes that test, easily.

I thought the backstory and context were great, and well worth it to get to the really well-written oral scenes. Wow--really good.

Thank you guys so much for your comments! I cannot tell you how much I appreciate feedback!

Katie

I see you still have some of the Olympics jumps and "impossible stuff" going on ;), but all in all, a very good read! :D

...is the next chapter ready yet? :p

I loved this, but there's so much left open here. I checked your submissions page for a sequel, only to find bupkiss. Seriously make a sequel. This story feels like a great Ch. 1, but it is in dire need of a Ch. 2. Or 3. Or 35. I have you favorited, and I will probably read anything you post. To quote "The Fault in Our Stars", I would read your grocery lists. Probably. But a sequel to this particular story is in order.