All Comments on 'Carried Away'

i usually enjoy stories like this. but i like them as fantasies, not as ideas about how things ought to happen, or even the implication that in reality they may happen. the only factor limiting how much i liked this story was it's chilling realism. it seemed all too possible. but i think i liked it a lot. it was certainly well written and i rated it highly. i think i still need to think about this story to decide if i really like it or not. it's thought provoking, which i think is a good thing.

i liked the story in general the only thing that bothered me was how choppy the sentences were, it was kind of distracting. if that was fixed then i think the story would be even better.

Wtf

Grammar was ..way too distracting .

Improve it