by Jappio
Not perfect, but darned close! You might have played up the orgasm at the end a bit more, but that's nitpicking. Still a great story.
I always get turned on when a woman is stripped, but to have ANOTHER woman do it, and at a PARTY! WOW! Also, your character development was right on, and done in such a way that it was just enough to set this very provocative scene. The interaction that led to the fight, with the girl on the couch was also sensually done. I enthusiastically give you Five Stars, and want to read more of your work.