All Comments on 'Castro - Shemale Goddess Pt. 01'

So hot more please

Thank you for those who have read; I have never written anything before and I am not very confident in my ability so it is nice to get feedback. I welcome any positive or constructive feedback and just saying you liked it if you did. Pt. 02 is underway.

Interesting beginning and I’m wondering what’s going to happen when the TS returns. At the moment it moves fairly easily from one situation to another but it needs to flow rather than be forced. Good going for first time and hope you can build on an innovative start.

Thanks Em I am finding the flow more difficult now; I will keep the transitions in mind. Much appreciated

Thank you to those who sent feedback; very useful Pt 02 is with the mods I'm going to take a bit more time on Pt.03 to act on the useful pointer and hopefuly craft something a little better for your reading pleasure