by HiRez
loved it. extremely turned on as a female. cant wait to find out what asad gets upto next. fantastic description could almost smell it
I read your story several times but never noticed when you referred to Jake as another 18 year old holding your costume. I liked much of your story. Asad is an almost perfect wetdream. I hope Coach Jacobs gets his drug dealing ass in jail soon. How many teenage lives has he already ruined? I don't care if the coach gets his catharsis. This isn't a fucking ancient Greek drama! Keep writing. You show talent.
I appreciate the feedback. I have a hella busy schedule at the moment, but I'm working on chapter 2
I really enjoeyd this hot story, thanks for it. I think some young studs are too light-hearted, Asad too.
They have to learn that their actions also have consequences. It was an unexpected but enjoyable lesson for Asad.