All Comments on 'Caught'

Not bad. Is her name Evelyn or Yvette? You used both. No biggie tho. Pretty good story.

The story is about a man named Brian who is writing a story about two co-workers named Yvette and Stuart.

Brian's co-worker is named Evelyn. Evelyn is intrigued by reading Brian's story.

I submitted the story using two different fonts to help readers distinguish between Brian's life and his story. Unfortunately, when it was published, all fonts were changed to one common font.

Maybe it's a little confusing, but I hoped people would get it.

Hard to follow at times. I recognized the story teller and his story, that's easy.

But when her husband comes home, first to watch her, then to announce he's home...then she's looking for his car to make sure he's not home. my head spun a bit.

A little fast on the shift. This could use a tilde or other separator to indicate the shift in personalities.

A decent story, fairly hot. This has some great elements to it.

Keep writing!

Couldn't stop till I read the whole series.

Very well written!