All Comments on 'Centerfold Angel'

Personally, I think you cheapen the relationship with Debra Jo usong the word "fuck" instead of "making love". Good read, otherwise.

Reminds me of other stories I've read.

I greatly enjoyed this one too.

Only critique, it wasn't long enough.

I DON'T DO IT OFTEN, BUT THIS TIME I HAVE TO AGREE WITH ANONYMOUS. YOUR WORDING SHOULD HAVE BEEN A LITTLE SOFTER. MAKING LOVE SOUNDS BETTER THEN JUST FUCKING. OTHER THEN THAT NOT BAD....LAROC OF AGES

Not long enough, hope the next chapter includes the other sister with the three of them going at it. Cunt lapping sex maniac UK

The only thing I missed on this was having his receptionist join in. Debra had made it clear that she picked up on the woman's interest. And the way you ended your tale certainly leaves it open for some further incest with their shared sister. I hope we get to read about that, as well.

Jolene will get involved. Debra Jo will see to it. Love this story. Lot's of possibilities. Thanks.

I hope that you will consider adding another chapter or two. This was a beginning and needs some resolution to the possibilities which you have started.

This was one great story.. cary on :D

A nice variation on the unknown sister plot. Now get Jolene involved!!

Excellent beginning. Keep going please!

Maybe in the next chapter he could get her pregnant and make a threesome with his redhead assistant.

leave them as a couple ,but tell jolene and she is ok with it.

Well done !

A nice twist to the ending.

I wonder what Jolene will feel when she finds out her brother is fucking their sister, even though Debra Jo is their half sister.

It didn't say how close Dell was to his sister Jolene, but perhaps he could wind up fucking both of his sisters.

Thanks for the very good read.

Too bad it couldn't have been Debra Jo Fondren. Not that would have been a story.

I agree that I would like to read about Jolene's reaction to the Dell and Debra's new relationship. I would also like to see how Barbie gets involved.

More more more more more . Awesome story Brett . Please continue .

I've read a semi similar like this, except the sis was an action star. One point though.These two are half-siblings who are strangers. So perhaps not quite incest.

Really exciting and romantic. Would enjoy a series of stories of these two and three siblings. Hot, romantic and sexy. Would Dell be able to handle his sister / sisters as lovers AND sisters. Enjoy the way Debra Jo responded with the news that she fucked her half-brother... This is HOT!!! Debra Jo, come back for more, more, and more.

young, taking pics of a hot centerfold model and then fucking her is hot enough but then find shes your hot half sister that still wants to be with you and love you is priceless hope theres more to add on to this story keep up the good work

Loved the emotion and passion from this one, 5 again.

Wonderful story ! Your still the best.....

OMG, is right my only complaint is the stories are too short and you are leaving so much more out there to expand on. Why not a follow up with the three siblings and family fun, why not throw in dell and Barbra and debra. So much more to work with on this story. Love it

Comment title says it all for me. I believe that a trip to California is in the works and the three sibs must get together. Liked the premise and your word choice as frankly too much SLUT, BITCH, CUNT, ruin the story flow and turn a quiet love story into one about domination, a way different story. Cheers

I realise it's been over 5 years since you wrote this, but please consider writing another chapter with all three of them involved?

These are great characters and the thought of Jolene being involved too would be the icing on this cake !

Rapier

It really was too good to only have one instalment.

Such great idea and big disappointment at the same time.

Rapier

I see you are back to leaving it hanging. What you are doing is frustrating your readers with really good 1st chapters and then not writing the next chapter(s). Do you intentionally leave a number of your stories like that so you can come back to them, if you feel like it, some time in the future? Oh well.

One of the very best stories in Literotica! Thank you! Please write another chapter.

Same father, different mothers makes them only half siblings . . . .