All Comments on 'CFNM: A Love Story'

Last two paragraphs don’t fit. Water sports already? Also nursing students are not medical students. Otherwise super hot. 5 stars.

But it could have gone much more slowly, wtith many more details

For this kind of story the general overall intelligence was refreshing.

Your plot struck a chord with me and I particularly enjoyed how you emotionally expressed and captured the girls, the girls having fun.

Good job keeping the story powerful by not insulting the reader's intelligence, being true to true to the five senses, and having edge - a continual sexual charge running throughout.

Some stories get bogged down or dogmatic because of too much detail. This didn't yet it perhaps could have had a bit more sprinkled throughout making it richer.

Remember it's not possible to please everyone. Keep being true to you in your writing, that's the power to storytelling.

Decadent, like silky chocolate. Yes Veronica you've grown today.

love the story would love to be Tim in this story.