by Jreforma
Chapter 1 extroadinary, full of tension shame brimming sexuality humor
Chapter 2 set up good in the school and then (unlike Henry's penis) deflation
Too much full on nudity puddle after costume - the tension held so well to start, the dreading wanting the humiliation when it happens... this became nude, then erection more complete nudity - for example the gals can command any male to strip at any time. So we want him to squirm in his seat, wondering when it will happen and by who? Now seated at his desk, bare behind on the wooden seat pants and undies around his ankles his penis saluting and the teacher about to call him to the front of the class. Etc. We want it by the tea cup and spoon slowly only then splash the entire punch bowl. So to speak. None the less you clearly are a real writer with talent and skill! Keep it up! (As it were)