All Comments on 'Changed'

Story is arousing but just not believable. Three years away from home? Parents letting 18-year-old twins share a bed? Or even up to age 15 before she left? And you'd think this probably would have played out back then. But, still, there's a sweetness to the characters and the budding relationship.

Is that it? The title said she falls in love with her brother and they just discover masturbation together by accident? How can anyone come to that age without even knowing how to do that? Mom and Dad haven't thought of the necessity of even providing bunk beds for brother and sister in their teens? They've sent her away for four years with no explanation but a vague reference to her being rebelious. In four years she has had virtually no contact with males? This is a fantasy that is so unrealistic that it isn't even a good stroke story. It is just stupid. I kept waiting for some depth to the story, some kind of backstory. Is he still the good son? What made her the daughter that got sent away? Why? If they couldn't afford to bring her home for holidays and summers, how could they stand to be away from their daughter for four goddamn years? If you want to write you have to learn how to develope a character. What is her story? Who are their parents? This might be about a twin brother and sister, but Mom and dad can be important to their lives and therefore their story. Why do Mom and Dad think nothing of them sharing a queen bed as teenagers? Are Mom and Dad, themselves, brother and sister? To tell their story you have to tell about the world around them. I can't say I hated it, it isn't about humiliation or being mean to each other, but I also can't say that their is a whole lot to enjoy about it. There is very little entertainment value here. If this were real estate, you would say it has no "curb appeal". A sweet story without much to it.

So far a great build up. Please keep going

looks like a good start to a real brother sister love story. please continue. but please keep them exclusive.