by HopelesslyAddicted
I know this is listed under the category of Group Sex.. But this story has no sex at all in it, and appears to end abruptly. Is there ‘something’ missing, like part of the story?
Like your writing style...and I can see the potential. BUT I think you could have continued the story before cutting us off......it was too much fluff and not enough tease. Hope to see more.
Just delite the anonymous' if they are afraid to leave thier name they can'i be considered serious critics. I am waiting for the rest.
..please put this into the novella or romantic sections, it dont have anything at all to do with group sex..
Hi there it has the makings of a good story, I'm intrigued and waiting for more.
Put it in whichever category you want as it's you writing and developing the story.
Awaiting the rest with anticipation.
I did not find this very interesting. nothing held my attention, It was too short - it should have at least gone to the end of the dinner with Jason and wife and, left us with a tease about future chapters. Still, it has potential, try again and get nearer to the point please.
You drew me in very nicely, then I was going to the next page .... and...:( ... I do hope the story continues. Or, turn it into a chain story. I have so many directional thoughts for this one.
Maria Lopez is clearly a woman with the potential for wild passion and her husband has the feel of someone who would encourage his wife to follow her passion. I'm turned on by the idea that this woman is going to take what she wants before too long. I'm looking forward to the journey.