by MaryAnderson
I know it's good when I can't stop reading. The characters are great 3D personalities and the dialog is terrific.
You have to expand, this is a great story.... i love the characters and how you portray them. Plz consider writing more and expanding the story.... i would appreciate it and so would your readers.... thanks, larry
OMG, this is sooooo erotic. It just begs to continue... Please
Sort of like five separate stories connected loosely. Perhaps could be pulled together at the end, but it will still lack functional unity. Each individual sex scene is very well done, well written.
It looks pretty open ended looking forward to more coming in the future possibly
Mmmmmmm, Delicious...... Cannot wait for MORE and find out what haappens on the pool table.
Deserves, at the least, another chapter considering how you left this one hanging in mid air.. >:-)
Very erotic incest scenes. I hope you follow through with your offer to write more chapters.