All Comments on 'Cheat Day'

ehh

well that was an unexpectedly almost wholesome twist, i really liked it

if you take constructive criticism, i think the sex scene would be better if it was less euphemistic. the naughty girl)seven year old thing was sort of distracting as well, and it didn't have much to do with the end of the story. she could have sexual hangups without manifesting a child in her head, right?

What I thought was something that belonged more in the NonCon category turned out to have a very sweet ending. I really liked what you did with that. I genuinely did not see that coming.

Too much talking. More humping. Good plot and close. More sex.

It would have been a lot sexier if you could spell better. I was distracted from your story by trying to figure out what you meant when you wrote things such as lude— a slang word for Quaaludes, a drug commonly used in the ‘80s. I figured out that you meant “lewd”, but... And there were multiple others, too.l Zé h

There are volunteer editors. Your content was fine, but you need to work on presentation.