All Comments on 'Cheater'

And stupid. No one should accept a situation like this. Divorce the spouses and be with the one you love. Not the one you have to stay with.

Not sure how two people could consistantly leave their spouses at night and not be caught... I'm not sure; however, it does fullfill many people's fantasy.

If thats the best you can do, I mean absolutly no reason to stay married, is the fact they are cheating supposed to make this hot, cause it didn't work for me. Your grownups, quit cheating before you get someone killed or get divorced, this isn't fucking high school.

You switch POV between the narrator being Marilyn to talking about Marilyn. And is this couple doing this during their honeymoon? Are they honeymooning near the strip club where she works? Even minor confusion destroys story flow. This one needs a lot of editing...and maybe a fresh look at adding a story line. There isn't one yet.

Why do peeple write such SHIT.

going on into the years. How did her lover and his wife end up on there honeymood? Oh ya, this is fantasy, that is how they can to this every night. It could just be a dream she is having every night. The story and plot need more work.

with readers criticising erotic fiction as though it is reality. Boring, Boring, Boring. For God's sake, accept it is fantasy or get off this site.

Your putting your spin on this, you don't have a clue what this is either, no one gave it more than a 50 so even if it's a dream or nightmare, its not very good.

let's not get bend out of shape over it. Some editing required, POV changes makes it difficult to read. short and to the point story, not all that great but not all that bad either. Practice makes perfect, keep on writing.

but thanks for trying.

50 for trying - and try the other angle with the cheating slut getting decent consequences for once.

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the absent spouse may not be as dense as they believe. A price for everything I suppose.

Very high quailifications for a piece of trash.

Pathic

says it all

or pathetic?

anon 02/14/14

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...so they meet on a regular basis, he appearently is the only man she loved - and neither of them is willing to divorce the partner? Obviously, both haven´t got the least respect for their spouse, no bad concience or love either. The story was way too short so it lacked developement or explanations. It didn´t satisfy me. Maybe there will be a sequel with consequences sometime? I hate cheaters getting off as easy as this.

What a cunt, cannot be honest with anyone. Hope they both die in a fire.

just follow the used game trails. TK U MLJ LV NV

thank you Michelle. Well told. Short vignette.

***Thanks for the read?