by PretendWithMe87
The story seems pretty good, and the build up is going at a pretty good pace.. but the fact that it is separated into parts that get released every few days is such a turn off... Quite literally
By splitting the story like that, it seems to break the build up that you have been creating. If you like this style,fine, stick with it. It doesn't hurt to be your own person. I want to see more from you.
TRUE IT SHOULD HAVE BEEN A 1 CHAPTER STORY BUT, TO HAVE IT UNFINISHED RATES A 3 STAR ENDING.