All Comments on 'Cheating Wives Always Get Caught - FTDS'

Are you going to continue the story?

Oh that's just not fair, FTDS,what about Anita and Monique

Loving? Nope, more like sick, demented losers. Yuck.

I tend to agree with Sugna. This was pretty sick. What do they do now, call the dominatrix for advice? FTDS, you are a great writer and your conclusions to the stupid tales you pick are legendary. However, this one should have done differently.

Just my opinion, one lunatic to another.

no rating

To see a once reasonably competent writer turn back into a wanna-be. This mindless, mixed-up, mish-mash is just plain silly. A pale echo of the original.

You're no better than edrider and his 1* garbage. How you can call him a great writer is beyond me, he can't even be bothered writing something worth reading and have you bothered reading any of his comments? Or just taken note of how many there were?

Started reading then decided it would be a good idea to see what happened in the original by Mr. Ed. Sick response? Not hardly. The original was pretty bad to begin with. This just brought closure to the couple. Reminds me of a story about jumping to conclusions. In the process they discovered something about themselves. The biggest is the lack of communication. As long as their "New play" doesn't escalate out of control, they should make it. In her case it still could be a real possibility. Sure, there are many levels of response to someone who tries for misguided revenge for cheating. In the case of how Mr. Ed framed it, this was a much better ending to another BS story. No wimps here. As for Laura? She got what she deserved. She could have lost her job and spent a few years behind bars.

I still wonder about stories where the wife turns, forces or coerces her husband into a wimp cuck. What does it take to where he snaps? What kind of responses could he choose? Leaving death out, what would he do besides divorce? What revenge if any taken and still stay together? So many options. In this case, it was divorce or get to the bottom line and seek revenge. Thanks for posting. 4*'s.

I thought the original was poor but this is even worse, made more so because normally you're a far better writer. A real case of the lowest common denominator. It scored a 2** only because it is better written; not your best work.

...he's finishing someone else's story, he has to work with the set-up he's given. Does he provide an ending that's as good as or better than the original? I think so. If you disagree, that's fair enough, but don't chew FTDS's butt because you don't like edrider73's characters.

and the inquisition lives. TK U MLJ LV NV

Often times the women in Ed's stories are given ENTIRELY too much freedom to do as they wish against their spouses or lovers and there's hardly ever any retribution for it. I feel that this story balances the true lack of choice and power presented by the original. The wife had to SHUT UP and listen to her husband defend himself and she got to taste similar pain that he had endured. In truth I don't advocate abuse towards women, but Ed's stories almost always lean me in that direction. Anyway with the way that this story was resolved I'm quite content, but I do hope that you'll continue on with the other two women mentioned at the end. 5/5

Also for the record on this site in the Loving Wives category there is an author whose stories while very well written will consistently "drive his readers crazy" even worse than Ed's do, and he's called Matt Moreau.

The original was terrible. This is horrible. It belongs in a different category. Why not learn to write your own shit, rather than regurgitating other writer's efforts?

Started out posting reasonably OK but then began to decline.

Enough said.

I commend you on any efforts you make on trying to finishing these unfinished stories . I laugh at these morons that say to you to do your own stories , which you have . As i see it , a author that left an open ending or a story not finished is open game . All of the stories you do a ending to have been dormant way to long . I also believe that when you finish a ending to a story , that part of the story is all yours regardless who wrote the first part . With the thousands of stories on here you would have to be just plain stupid to believe that authors don't get ideals from other stories that they may have read . So in a since if they use an ideal from another story to make theirs better than that story should not be considered theirs . Now how stupid is that ? Anyway I enjoy reading your stuff whether it is you finishing a story from someone else or your own . Thanks

MER

Oh well, maybe the next time I will enjoy the story line. I am not inclined towards torture as this occured and can see no erotic content in your manufactured world.

You do write many good endings and I look forward to seeing your name in the column, just not this story line. I suppose you write for the many who have different phobias and you have hit it out of the park on many endings(actually stories) that are some of my favorites. Carry on soldier.

comes together.

Very clever. Nicely done

Sad to say, you are incorrect. Most affairs (north of 50%) never get caught and women are better at hiding it than men.

Sad news.

Excelent finish to a story that definitely needed a finish

One of your better finishes i think.

and no way to forgive

But completely in line with the original story. Weird as hell, repellent enough at times that I had to skip parts here and there, but, overall, entertaining as hell.

But just plain weird!

*Sigh**

After reading "Cheating Wives Always Slip Up", I thought WTF?! as usual. Ed always has a way of pissing people off, and that is a testament to his writing ability, as you said at the start, FTDS.

That said, you spun a sequel worthy of your talents. Seriously, you are definitely challenging JPB for his crown as the King of Twisted. Hubby and Wifey realized they were being played and got revenge. It was sick. It was twisted. It was downright inhumane. The really sick part was that it worked for me. They lowered themselves to their opponents' level in order to exact payback. Some say you can't come back from that. I say that this is fiction, and anything can happen in fiction. lol

5 Twisted Stars.

for the story. That said I think you did an excellent job on this story considering what you had to work from. This person's stories are designed to make people mad and all of his or her characters are dispicable. And I don't mean that in the Daffy Duck way.

You are a hell of a writer but sometimes there is no fixing something. If you want a real challenge go back to this same cesspool and try to straighten out a strange car in the driveway or whatever it's name is. If you can give the male in there some way to work it out without the usual RAAC then you can fix the national debt next because you will be the McGovern of Literotica.

say you would be the McGiver of literotica. Darned auto correct.

Leave it to FTDS to come up with a reconciliation story that actually feels good.

based on the original, but still....Herb and Maureen,

although victims of a set-up, both seem

slighty nuts and dysfunctional.

5 twisted stars.

Nice recovery.

Pretty twisted beginning, so it makes sense that your conclusion would maintain some of the negative character traits originally introduced. The complete story was not that great, but it was interesting to see how you picked up this fumble and carried it across the goal line. I think it should be understood that the rating of this conclusion is totally separate from the rating for the original story. That really sucked.

Do you ever feel like the janitor, cleaning up the garbage that some thoughtless or clueless writer leaves behind? I for one appreciate not only your contribution, but you making this FTDS process so intriguing. I suspect 10 different authors could easily craft 10 different conclusions or sequels to many stories. I really enjoy the vast majority of yours, and appreciate the time and energy you put into entertaining us. Thank You!

I'm disappointed for the first time in one of FTDS's ending. This one was awful. The wife should have been taken to court, publically destroyed and left with nothing. With NOTHING.

I'm sick to my stomach after this ending.

But this as a standalone is still gold.

Leonji

Excellent recovery..my only criticism is that we never find out who was behind the conspiracy and what they did....another thing that is a bit unrealistic,rattan canes are nasty,and even three strokes done at full strength could do serious damage,especially with an amateur doing it,someone could go into cardiac arrest from the shock.

glad these characters lived happily ever after. So sa'eth the FTDS.

Great way to end a story.

Thanks for sharing on Lit.

DD

I never thought anyone could write in a reconciliation given what had transpired.

I did not (and still do not) believe that the original needed a completion. BUT, I enjoyed the FTDS tale immensely. It was a plausible and faithful follow-up of the characters and the information in the original tale!

Now, who will 'Finish The Damn Incomplete Finish Of The Story?' Not so sure about Monique, but anybody who assisted The Evil Bitch needs some come-uppence! Maybe The Evil Bitch could be offered a role in THAT escapade! That way, our Hero & Heroine could be joint liars about the delectable episode being a one-and-done!

"FTDS wrote... "edrider73 is a master storyteller There's no denying it. Nobody currently writing on Lit has the same ability to drive a reader absolutely crazy"

are you fucking HIGH? I can write a story about how the Jews control the world and hitler was a great man and drew a HUGE reaction. Doesnt make me a master storyteller. Edrider73 is dangerous mentally ill asshole who is probably Matt M. (Ed appeared the same month that MM stop writing/ posting stories

The wife's reaction to her husbands's cheating means this story does NOT have to be finish. The wife should be DEAD and Buried the fucking ground

Oh the original tale absoluty needed a finish. We were left with the psycho giving hubby an ultimatum and had no clue what happened. It was like Titanic ending when the ship set sail. The problem with this one is FTDS needs to FTDS. What happens to Anita and Monique and any other co-conspirators? It seems like they had something in mind. And FTDS has done multi-part finishes before. Maybe he will for this. Great effort. 5*

I wonder if you realise how much you reveal about yourself when you write these stories.

Should be in fetish this is just crap

I get that this author wanted to be kind to the writer who gave him permission to write this but the original was the most ridiculous story I've read in a long time. A wife beats a man's balls with a cane. He faints after only one hit and she thinks she's going to continue that for an hour or two without doing permanent damage?

I have to take my hat off to FTDS for making the rest of the story somewhat believable but at no time during the story did I have any respect for either character. I would encourage FTDS to pick better stories to end. For the first time, I find agree with HarryVA.

Ohio was right about the opening story by Ed...; there was something there, something that needed to be explored. You explored it, and you did quite a fun job doing so. Now this is finished; there's nothing more to add, no Anita or Monique.

This was a very interesting continuation; perhaps this was your best 'finish'. That in no way should impede you from continuing to finish things. God knows there's a ton of incomplete thoughts out there.

I want to thank you for your accomplishment here and with some other tales. I'd like to see a thank you from Ed... also.

Another five for sure.

All your stories would be better if the male got revenge and than moved on with his life.....most of your endings usually have the guy take the girl back, but you always overlook trust...how can the trust be restablished? Usually it can't.

So much pain and he is still with her. This is beyond sick.

How can anyone relate to such a sick story, a wife who thinks her husband cheated going to great lengths to cause him such pain and possibly permanent injury. And he stays with this sick physco. Either you confront him or divorce him but you do not love him. This story belongs in the nut house, insane asylum .

But what about Anita and Monique?

Should'nt they get a Touch up.

The best revenge would've been to reveal what those three did to set them up. Laura was assaulted, abused and used because she agreed to it so she wouldn't be found out. Exposing their scam would've caused them to get fired and put a dark mark on them and screw up employment for them in the future.

5 *'s Edrider73's was certainly different, but you took it to a new level. I always believe that the punishment should fit the crime. And once again, this demonstrates how important COMMUNICATION is in a marriage.

At first, after reading it, I wasn't going to read the initial story... but I realized I couldn't really fairly comment on this one without doing that. So I did.

The first was amazing in an "egads" sort of way. And I couldn't help but feel there was something SERIOUSLY wrong with that woman...

The odd thing about her was not the willingness to do what she planned - after all, some serious BTB stories involve the hubby doing pretty awful stuff. The odd thing is her presumed intent that the punishment be a way to get PAST the perceived actions. And while not impossible, it is uncommon.

That being said, your story melded perfectly into the original. It gave her a chance to see just how seriously fucked up she was to think that what she planned made sense as a FIRST step rather than as an action to take AFTER talking with him. Clearly, she wasn't initially interested in some form of getting past it - her primary initial goal was punishment. Now again, hubbys in a lot of BTB stories are initially interested in punishment too but I'm not too keen on that concept of escalation of actions - they break your heart, break their heart... if your life wasn't destroyed or ended, you don't destroy or end them... no matter HOW fun it might be. ;)

Just ask the geeks who got picked on in school heh

You might think getting even helps - and it can but only after a fashion - the final win is moving beyond it after dealing with it -

In this case - as extreme as it was - I do think they did that - cool enough in an impossible to pull off way lol

After reading the original, and reading the bile she spewed at him, what she had planned to do to him, after SHE cheated, (Yes, she cheated. Seeing a dominatrix is the same thing as if he had been with a prostitute!), at the way she assaulted him, there is NO way on earth anyone in their right mind would go anywhere near her, let alone stay married to the psychotic bitch!

Not badly written but doesn't align with the original? Her then and her he are like,two,different people.

I need to disagree with you about Edrider's skills. I think he's one dimensional. Most of the male characters in his stories behave in the exact same manner. They lie down and accept any form of torture the women dish out. Usually gross and vile things to the men's asses. Things that would send any man to the hospital for major surgery to repair the damage. When you start with such mediocre characters, it's hard to turn out something worthwhile. What you had and have in Edrider's story and in your followup are broken, sick people. Torture and violence without rhyme or reason. There is just no way you could make them into decent or likeable characters. Lacking that, the story simply wasn't fun or interesting to read. You could spend months finishing off Edrider stories. Another annoying fact is that he leaves most of his stories unfinished or incomplete. So while I agree that he irritates readers, it's not because he's a good writer. It's because he writes the same vile stuff, over and over and over again. (How many times has he used the "helium" voice that doesn't work considering the effect fades rapidly.) His stories score universally low because of this and other facets of his writing. Unfortunately in this followup, you failed to put an acceptable ending to one of his messes. Can't fault you for trying. Keep at it. 99% of his stories need endings. Yo don't lack for material. Done with him? Try some of JPB's stories. At least Bob mixes it up and he CAN write. He just leaves some of them unfinished (to be completed in the reader's mind is one of his favorite endings). Write on!

i was actually really enjoying this one right up to the very end. The whole premise behind their actions was that they both hated cheating. And then to get revenge on this woman...he fucks her! Odd choice. Seems a dildo would have been sufficient.

Congrats. This was a brilliant ending to a very disturbing story. Five out of five. Your writing as usual is superb. Both characters here were very believable.

The original story really needed a continuation. I don't like BDSM stories and I would not have read the original if it had been so tagged. But the actual punishment was secondary to the incredible intensity of what was happening between two people. That was spellbinding.

I kept thinking about the original for days. I was going back to read it again when I saw your ending. Thank you very much.

Your ending cleverly caught something I noticed in the original which is she had been hit by the dominatrix and he didn't notice. I wondered how she could have been struck and hurt so badly and marked him not notice. The answer is she was only lightly hit.

She also got a brilliant line in your story about how he would not have enjoyed it if the situation had been reversed and a male dom had hit hit and then caused him to cum. Herb acknowledge her clever argument with a "well played."

OK, enough praise. Here comes some constructive criticism. You didn't really explain her over-the-top plan for punishment. Neither did she. Did his alleged cheating drive her insane? Did you take some uppers before she started and had a bad reaction? In all fairness maybe there is no explanation. It is so extreme. But it does make Maureen in the first story and Maureen in the second story not quite match up.

My next criticism is that you had Herb take Maureen back awfully quickly. Granted you didn't want to write a novel. But, man, Herb forgave a lot even though they bonded over punishing Laura. I think a temporary separation or her sleeping in the spare bedroom for a while or them trying to make love and him not getting an erection because of a flashback; any would have improved the story IMHO.

On the other hand I already gave you a five and I can hardly give you more. ;-)

Cheers Steve

Anita and Monique? will you ever write how they Punished them?

I don't know how you do it without going totally ballistic ( M.A.D. ). YOU MAKE IT WORK, the human nature kind of forgiving middle ground thing. I just love most of your stories and reread them to see if I missed something. I'm also wondering if maybe you are also somebody else.....another words, do you write under another NAMES...

bill........

5ssssss

I don't understand Laura's motivation for setting them up. Must have missed it, or maybe it isn't there.

Now her turn. She gets a gun, shoots both of them but leaves them disabled. She goes to jail and gets out in five years.

Maybe not the same punishment as Laura got, but those other two gotta get theirs too. SEQUEL!!!!!!!!

I love the twists you put on those open ended (leave 'um hanging...which I hate) stories. I'm glad you're cleaning up some of these disastrous attempts. Big props to you!!! Keep it up. I've read a couple more on here that could use your touch to clean up. Keep writing.

Actually a very powerful story. Quite an up and down plot. The ending was FANTASTIC. What a buildup. Left me wanting a sequel. Anyway, I really enjoyed it. Thank you so much.

Damn made me hard thinking of using my wife like they want to do. That would be a fantasy night to be remembered forever.

What did become of Anita & Monique. us readers would like to know.

A little rough, but definitely better than the original.

I cracked up when I read the ending. That was ingenious. Great job, well written.

The ending ruined it.

They go from being ready to kill each other, torturing each other because they both thought the other had sex with someone else, to having a threesome and planning more?

Oh well, I guess it's all right, letting me use my imagination.

Good story. Only a few points of dissonance. In the original story the wife used a leather covered wire whip - which to my mind is way way way too harsh. I shudder to think that about all the horses they were used on in the day.

Also in the first story I remember the wife only giving the hubby one stroke between the cheeks. The other two were across the cheeks. I guess I could be remembering wrong.

But I think the cane would be better, although it's hard to see the without bending (and breaking,) a cane could get all the way from above the asshole to the pussy, with the woman tied on her belly, or even on all fours as long as the 'whipper' is standing behind the bed. It's the angles you see.

Still a five star story, Very compelling. I wish we could read about the revenge on the other two, in detail LOL.

And Laura went along with it? I really was gripped by Maureen's intensity in her punishment of Herb. Then he turned the table and really prolonged M's pain by stretching it out over a few hours. The unraveling of the plot by her co-workers was classic. The confrontation with Laura was a little much if she was beaten for hours. That Herb and M both had sex with Laura is Literotica-worthy. Great story.

Ok

The start of a whole string of Sub-Genre's. A bit brutal for my tastes but I do understand the intense feelings behind their actions when they performed together on Laura, just not their individual ones on each other. Make that hers on him, his I really do understand. Should have been a second chapter or two on the consequences for Anita and Monique though.

This was the WEIRDEST story I've ever read.

To me, and I have felt a SHIT TON of continuous pain my whole long life, Pain is Nature's way of saying STOP DOING THAT YOU IDIOT, YOU ARE DAMAGING YOURSELF!!

Thanks for another save. I really get worked up about injustice, even if it was just a story. After hearing what the wife had planned I would have punched her in the face and left.

Finish the story what happens to Anita and Monique

Great story... can’t wait for the next chapter about Monique and Anita. Thanks

What a great finish. Well done, but wait the story is not finished, Anita and Monique, they need to be dealt with. Like your pen name says: Finish the Dam Story. 5 stars

A totally different perspective but very good. Both the original and this story shows what happens when there is a lack of communication! 5*s.

Would’ve loved to see this continue with Anita and Monique. Another chapter would be great.

Scores 5/5

SUCH PATHETIC PUNISHMENT FOR LAURA....JUST A REASON FOR HERBTO FUCK HER 4 TIMES....SURELY THAT IS CHEATING.....REALLY FUCKED UP PUNISHMENT FOR LAURA

Good one

zerozerozero. you should not have finished the damn story. I quit on it before I finished the first page.

Violent, sickening and way, way, way over-the-top. Didn't like this one at all.

Would've been better if they hadn't of stooped to her level and punished her. Should've got her fired and put in jail, end of story..

Actually since You were warned about the content in advance. Nicely done.

I appreciate you trying to make a story out of the unfinished mess, but this one really just needed a call to 911, a restraining order, and a quick divorce on the grounds of abuse.

This story is akin to sitting in a huge pile of shit while being pissed on and being told its the rain.

I've yet to read a positive comment from xhristianj...

Bit over the top story though.

You do well however, in finishing tales off.

It must be real scary inside your head. Loved the outcome.

THIS WAS A CRAP STORY

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Very OTT and fun as heck!

11/10 Canes!!!!!

Finished the damn story.

Way to finish!!!!!!

To me it was just a silly pain story, but there will be lots who like it I'm sure

What they did to Laura was way over the top an consent or not I would forced them to give up all evidence of any crime an then head to the police an get her done for assault and him for rape

BDSM story