All Comments on 'Cheese and Clicks'

Nice blend of humor, uncertainty, possibility.

You've been a story writing machine this last while and the quality remains high. Well done sir!

You handle spoken words well (that's not too common !).

I look forward to seeing more of this sparring match.

Thank You

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No vote at this point. If you fail to finish then the score will revert to the "1" that is reserved for all unfinished works.

Good start, but this really deserves to be finished.

I have just discovered your work and I am thoroughly enjoying it! You are fast becoming one of my very favorite authors. You have some brilliantly original story lines and (as one other comment already stated) your command of the spoken word is excellent. As another said, this story deserves to be finished. I sincerely hope that you will consider that at some point in the future.

Another great start to a story. Please continue it for us, your readers.

Liked this quite a bit. But, it's like the first chapter in what should be at least a 20-chapter story. It sets the story and gives insights to the main characters. Now it needs to be fleshed out with what happens to them. I am really looking forward to reading a continuation!!

P.S. It's so nice to read a story that has good grammar and spelling. Thanks for writing it.

I would have given this high marks if it had been finished. I am sorry I wasted my time.

Thank you for writing but please write more stories that are completed.

Sometimes it's better that the author leave the meat of the story to the reader's imagination. Almost anything can happen. I like to create endings. 5*