All Comments on 'Child No More Ch. 01'

I hope you continue. The Philippines is somewhere I would love to visit someday!

So far it sucked. Never been to Manila. Not into LBFMs but that's me. Guess I'll have to wait for chapter 2

1 star

DragonRider55

Beartriz, you say in your introductory note that it may seem a bit slow. There wasn't enough of it to determine whether it will be slow or otherwise. If you intend to continue with very short episodes, I hope you bring them out with no more than a couple of days between each one.

But as a sample of your writing, I thought it was well written and very readable. I look forward to what comes next. I see from your biog note that this is your first submission after a long time here as a reader. A worthy first story.

Lue

... you need to look up the difference between 'waved'and 'waived'.

This has the makings of something interesting, so I hope you'll post more chapters soon, but I also hope that you'll make them longer; this chapter built up nicely and was just beginning to get the sort of interesting where you want to keep reading - then it stopped...

One thing, if you'll permit a spelling correction: it's wave, not waive; you wave at someone, but waive a charge or fee.

Oh, and ignore the person who's given you 1* just because s/he doesn't like LBFM stories. They're just being an idiot.

Dear Author, A very nice beginning to what could become an interesting love story. Enjoyed this short and look forward to more of the same. Thank you for the five star journey. jntiques

Not sure it’s enough to hook me, but it has potential.

Awe how sweat!

And she keeps a vibration in her pookie.