All Comments on 'Chinese Takeout Ch. 01'

you're the best.

Another delicious story!++++

Chloe,

I absolutely love your stories. Your description of the characters makes me feel like I've known them forever. Can't wait to read the next chapter. Thank you for sharing your writing with us! Want to take a ride with me on my Harley? LOL

You've been one of my favorite authors since you starter posting, and with this story the streak keeps going!

I wasn't sure if I wanted to trudge through another cliched First Time story. However, I am pleased that I made the effort for this one.

The story is a clever adaptation of believable. Your characters are well developed and talk like real people. It will be fun to read the future chapters of this storyline.

And, sigh...now I'm gonna have to squeeze in the time to read your other postings!

First of all, I love your stories and this one is off to a great start. Keep writing and publishing often!

But please tell me there are more Haley stories coming soon? She is by far your most interesting character and I thought the series was at a point where it could have gone in many interesting directions.

I like these people, even the ones I am not supposed to like :), they are real, you know these people - confess, you have dated some of them.

Okay, I have to say thanks again for all the great comments and ratings. I'm totally happy that you're all enjoying this one as well. Next chapter of "Chinese Takeout" is being worked on, as is another Strawberry story and a new stand-alone, "The Temptation of Sammi Woo." Have to say, all you guys provide great encouragement. So happy that you're enjoying these stories - and the characters. And the dialogue (thx for that - that's something I've really been working at, along with the plotting...)

But where's Haley you ask? Okay, Hayley was my first go here, I charged into her without putting too much thought into the plotting for the overall story - so I've been working on the plot and now I have more or less have an overall plot in my head which'll mean a few changes in the back-story here and there. So there's an additional Prologue coming as well as an immediate sequel to the last Hayley story I posted. Working on both of those as well. All in between working - but really, it's worth it when I read all your comments and the emails I get.

Thankyou all so much for reading and commenting on my little tales...... Chloe

And so nice to see Jay-Lin doing her bit for multi-cultural relations.

L

...and I was pleased that the "gweilo" did not turn out to be a villain!

-Rei (a "gweilo")

Hi Chloe

I have read many hundreds of stories on here and often find myself speedreading past the irrelevant bits, or giving up half way if the story isn't going anywhere etc.

I read every word of this, some of it twice, and automatically clicked on 5 and favorite author -my first ever!

I have never been on a bike in my 60 years but by the end if it that was me riding away, waving to Chloe.

I can't wait for chapter2, it would be great if you could send a PM when you submit.

H

It's just occured to me you give plenty of detail but your descriptions of people are lightly done, giving your reader the chance to complete the picture to their own expectation or taste.

Please no MM tits or 36 inch dicks, it's better the way you have done it.

XX

thx Harvey_32 :)

Happy I'm making the grade. Now that's the reader reaction I'm after!!!! Re picturing the characters, you're right more or less, altho for myself I work a lot with photos to help build a picture in my mind. If you go to Pinterest and look up Chloe Tzang, you'll find me there, along with a couple of folders I use for images for my stories. One's called "Snow Falling on Taipei" and the other's "Hayley's Party." There's a photo of how I see Jay-Lin there (with a Mercedes in the background).

Ciao...... Chloe

I love your stories. Hope to read the rest soon. ;)

great setup for what's to come... looking forward to it.

Bizarre mix of Mandarin and Cantonese.

辣妹 is usually applied to Hunan, rather than Sichuan.

And no one 'goes to' dim sum. It makes no sense. They go to 飲茶 where they eat dim sum (點心).

You nailed my guilty secret. Third generation ABC. I don't know any chinese! Well, a few words, can't write it to save my life and all I know is a few cantonese (my grandparents) and a bit of bad mandarin (saturday morning chinese class which I hated....). So yes, guilty as charged. Get a lot of this online. So Hunan vs Sichuan. Urk! No idea. Right over my head. Can't exactly ask my Mom or my grandparents for help with these stories can I. LOL. Well, I could, but I'd be excommunicated! If you're willing to volunteer :) just send me our email address...... Chloe

For those that are interested, just submitted Chapter Two of Chinese Takeout so it should be available to read by mid-week.

Ciao..... Chloe

...Interested to see how it unfolds.

Your 1st story I've read + I don't think last.

Well-written, likable characters, and I like the dialog.

I hope/presume she enjoys some more (big) 'firsts' next chapter....

A "good" girl on the back of a Harley... oh my!! The horror!!

I once drove a motorcycle with side car here in Beijing and it had a certain thrill ride effect on a certain young lady a ways back ;) hmm.. maybe I should write that one up as a story

A delicious story. Thank you!

This is the third writing of yours I have read.

I am liking the story, but will wait until I see how it builds. I am not sure about cultural ideologies but after getting pissed about a jerk pawing her and then let a biker dude place his hand on her crotch. I think her persona and cultural training would a least have an auto-reflex mechanism. But perhaps with this audience the faster the girl gets nailed may weigh heavily on the likes. It might be too much for some to wait for part II.

Keep on writing, you are good!

Chloe Tzang, I noticed at the beginning of the story you wrote “Readers be warned, this is the first chapter in a multi-chapter story, there's no sex in this first chapter. This is all lead-in and teaser for the main event which will be a chapter or three coming. That said, I do hope you all enjoy.” That’s not a problem for me as I don’t particularly care for explicit sex in a story. I did enjoy your development of Jay-Lin’s character and your presentation of her thoughts and feelings. For example, “Not that I wasn't a bit of a nerd myself. It was hard not to be with my parents. My parents, in other words, were typical Chinese parents. But at least I had aspirations.” and “I don't know what he saw in me but there was something about him that tugged at me.” This is what I look for in a story so thank you. I also liked your “Chinese Language Notes.” Actually I would like to learn more about Asian cultures. I have found some videos of Chinese music and dance on youtube.

Moonlight and Roses (Tom),

Thanks for the cultural introduction!

I'm one of those big hairy guys and

enjoyed the little excursion into a different world.

with Anticipation - it was jarring to have her allow the biker's hand on her after such a fuss about the prior octopus...

Yes, looking back, that's something I'd rework a little. When I was writing that originally, I wanted that book into the next chapter but it's a bit abrupt.

I've not read your work before. This has a really promising start. If I'm honest I prefer suggested rather than explicit sex, so this is "up my street" as we'd say here.

Thanks

Two men can do exactly the same thing, but if one is an entitled asshole the effect on a woman will be completely different, provided the other is attractive — and of course a man who is attractive to one woman will leave 100 other women completely cold.

I agree that the hand was a bit much after the experience with the hand on the butt. Seemed a little out of place.

Ok Chinese Eyes, I don't think she will turn out to be Takeout Chow Mien.

Zai jian..

Wow. Nice writing! I do like a bit of sex in my erotica but this was a great bit of foreplay to the story. Can't wait to read the next chapter.

Only noticed one spelling mistake and one place where I would have changed the punctuation. Nothing that distracted from my reading enjoyment. A rare thing on this site. Keep it up.

...But how did she take a picture of the license plate and send it in an email, if she forgot her phone ?

A real pleasure to read. It's not perfect but what is ? I liked the sense of her excitment you described at her meeting the biker and the feelings the experience drew out of her. There is an innocence there too which adds depth to the story. btw, my first real boyfriend was a biker, it was a hot and forbidden relationship.

I'm a lonely guy struggling with loss of my girl 3 years ago. Cancer. Did what boys do and started reading erotica in earnest. Tripped over Chloe's creations. Read them over'n'over. Bought her ebooks too. Every reread brings something new.

Its not just about the sex.

Appreciate how she researches to create the background which adds to the theatre of the plot. Introduced me to new worlds of which I know little. Sense of humour is ace. Not ashamed to say I regret, sometimes tearfully, that I never shared so many types of sensory experiences with my girl, but hopeful of a round two with an open minded princess someday.

All appreciated Chloe. Maybe, just maybe, you will update us on how the lives of Round Out and Jay-Lin, Bear and Sara are panning out...here's hoping!

Best,

John V