All Comments on 'Chloe Ch. 01'

Loved it!

Almost got through the first page but then I couldn't take it anymore. This Mechanical Contractor is very unlikable. He is belligerent and a hot head. And besides, anyone who used the F-word as an integral part of their ordinary, everyday vocabulary is a loser.

Tell this jerk to get to the chip off his shoulder.

Your excessive use of exclamation points is distracting, but not enough to keep me from reading! I'm looking forward to Chloe and her husband hosting their new black buddy in Chapter 2.

Wow I wonder how many white women have this as there deep dark secret fantasy.im a lover so most of my women have. Told me they want it deep and fast from time to time. That's when I use Shawn Michael dildo wow is he big and it never fails to bring the girls off some even squirt

As a fellow writer, I can tell you that an experienced Literotica editor can help you with some of the mistakes that riddle this piece. Excessive, inappropriate use of exclamation points, unnecessary detail given to irrelevant items in the story, incorrect use of dashes (to name a few) are so distracting as to be ruinous to the plot and could be edited out with a little help. I always feel that if a story is good enough to write, it's good enough to proofread and edit. It will be read at least by tens of thousands of people. Make it your best.

Wish I could give your story a higher rating then just a 5.

Minor grammer and punctuation problems or not, just couldn't stop reading this story.

Hot, Sexy, got my body raging hot. Needed to be in her place!

Thank you. Don't let anyone discourage you from writing. -tanyabrown

supposed to be exec vp? lfmao

you dont know biology do you? There isnt an 'entrance' to the cervix. You cant penetrate the cervix. Thats absurd nonsense you see in stories told by people who think thats an actual thing. its not.