by Tiger1978
""Mmmm, mama likes you fucking her baby.""
That's paedophilia.
""Mmmm, mama likes you fucking her, baby.""
That's consensual sex.
Absolutely love the set up for the story, the way the characters are drawn and their interactions on the plane. I think a lot of writers forget that you can have more then the two principle characters involved in the plot. Would have loved a little bit more detail in the sex scene, partly because I'm sure you would handle it well, and well, that's also why I'm here. But I enjoyed the story completely
Not bad! You're a very skilled writer, with a flair for strong visualizations.
You stumbled a little when you did the clique characters looking in the mirror to assess their own bodies bit, but it was handled much more originally than others.
Overall, I found it a very hot and quick read.