by Armphid
I enjoyed your story. Lucky for him she wasn't a Praying Mantis. Thank you for sharing.
5 stars will read again and look forward to further adventures of the two
Well done. Liked the original supers instead of using celebrity ones. Could have done without all the profanity personally. Still romantic. I hope you write more of these
Was utterly brilliant. Of course, now I have the voice of William Dozier in my head asking about what's next for the two young lovers and to check back later same lit topic, same lit URL.
This would be a great beginning for a series, an original superhero "universe"
That was one of the best stories I've read in some time. I hope you continue with this or other equally great stories.
This. This story, right here. This is the kind of stuff we're always looking out for, because it's so damn well written! I'm very excited to read this, and I surely will do kt again tonight, and I look forward to your next story. This is premium stuff right here!
I love it!
that this has the makings of a series. It's a great story. I couldn't resist the title! Good choice.
Unless it's linked genetically, do you know the odds of getting a ten-inch schlong AND superpowers?
Practically zilch. And that's assuming supers are common.
I can accept powers, but combining the two...
That makes it harder.
As a famous man once said (can't recall the name): "You can either be the last human left alive, or you can invent a time machine, but not both."
All I'm saying is it sorta pushes my suspension of disbelief.
The rest of it? Yeah, that was hot.
Fucking hell, this was genius! I've not read anything like it, and I'd surely love to read more of it! Well done.
1- Break off the ridiculous wall of text. Its an awful thing to read.
2- Tone down those descriptions. No need to get so heavy handed on the adjectives nor so hyperbolic, also, unecessarily big descriptions, completely break off the immersion.