by jonaahhhhhh
no incest = FAIL, piss poor spelling = FAIL, no real background = FAIL, no character development = FAIL, rushed weak plot = FAIL all around it was a FAIL and deserves a negative vote. where are the parents you never mentioned them or did the sibling just appear out of thin air?
I do not think I have read anything like that before. I could see why you would call it incest even though they did not have sex
Five stars for original and hot. Begs for a part two. Soon I hope.
Just unexpected situations which make it much interested to read. Deserves really 5 stars!
A good start then crap it would get "0" if I could rubbish
only thing i didn't like was the ending(but hopefully next chapter(ASAP) will remedy that)
Oh and one more thing,that shits me
everyone has a 100% right to criticize the story,but have the balls to use you're name not just Anonymous and try and be constructive in your criticism,so writer can improve,
the Anonymous option should really be taken off the comments section,either take the few seconds it take to join literotica or don't bother commenting
I'm okay with people not liking the story. The "piss poor spelling = FAIL" comment is weird though. There are no misspellings in the story ...
I'm glad some of you dug it though.
Cant wait for the next chapter.
dont worry about the anonymous comments they are just jealous cause they cant write a story like yours
kind of fucked up for his friends to bring stripper/hookers to his home with his sister there.why didnt he have go with him for his birthday as away to get her out of the house?cant say much for the way he or his friends since he could have told the women to leave also.
I'd like to see him and his sister getting together after they sober up and remember everything that had happened the night before, and wind up as lovers.
Thanks for the read.
It was different... not sure if I liked it or not... I have to digest it a bit to answer that.
However, about the anonymous coward below... The sister hiding in the room explains the boys not knowing she was there, and he didn't know what was coming... so the setup is fairly believable to me.
And I agree... be constructive if you can, and STFU if you want to be a total (in your words) wanker, and are too insecure to log your identity... in fact, the only reason I commented was due to your idiocy!
A view from another angle. A continuation of this story is essential. Also so nice to see the use of correct grammar and spelling.
Thanks
Len
I don't understand how writing a comment signed 'anonymous' is any different to signing one 'brosismom' unless some demented woman named her child that. Perhaps brosismom will include its postal address with its next comment.
I disagree with some of the negative comments. This is begging for another chapter.
I thought it was very well doen.
It seemed like another paragraph or two would at lest have them in bed together. And then the next chapter would bring the story to a climax!
More please.
I can still remember the Christmas of 1973. I was almost 17 and my little sister had just turned 15. It was Christmas eve, and she received a vary special present from me. A nice big hot load of semen DEEP inside of her little pussy. Merry Christmas Sis ! I still get her things for Christmas
Daaaang that was good. I wish I had a brother willing to do something like that
Is that all? It was erotic.. but wish it has gone farther with brother sister sex!
The author wrote a good story but he missed two golden opportunities. He should have taken his sister with him. And he ended the story before it became incest. When the strippers left he should have rolled over and made love with his sister. If he thought anything of his sister he should have done those two things. She deserved some loving sex just as much as he did.
Damm that was hot. Please make a part 2. My sis and I got so turned on reading this.