by Legman173
The premise was actually cute, and hot. But your sentence structure was weak and your characters slightly underdeveloped. Also, the dialogue got a little repetitive during the sex. Overall, pretty good.
This was really hot, from the beginning, on the dance floor, up till they started speaking back and forth while in the heat of the moment, the dialogue then could have been kept to a minimal. Not too much into the 2nd part with the licking of the hole, but whatever floats your boat, still was hot! Can't wait to find out if he will find her again, maybe have a blow job contest to find out if she is the one? :)
I would love to see more of the Slutty Princess Halloween stories!! Do share, please!
Easy 5 out of 5 from me ^_^
Overall, I really liked it. The dialog was a bit trite, yet the story line was solid.
I like where it's going and love that the chick is secure enough to fuck & leave it @ just that. So keep the series going :)
I'd be happy to see more stories like this, but more than that, I'd love to see a sequel to find out if he found her or not.
Very well written. Kept me hard, dripping and drooling all the way through. Write some more!