by Master_Vassago
It could have been alot better, you've done much better work than this. Very unrealistic, a girl would not simply start calling her captor 'sir' when captured, unless of course she was some sort of idiot. It could use some revamping, but you do have a decent plot line going.
-Ralph
proskier_rt@hotmail
This one was a little disappointed that the story seemed to be missing a middle. This little one is not an expert in plot development- but i felt that more action was missing. i do think that it has the makings of some fine chapters as the Professor teaches his sub to please him . She should, at least, have been punished for removing the blindfold.
Mmm... I would love to try that out with you sometime, Master sir. If I could just say....it might have been better of she hadn't enjoyed it. You should write one where she doesn't enjoy it, but you keep her held against her will as a sex slave.... Just an idea.