by LondonBoy
Nice gentle start. Looking forward to developments.
The dialogue IS so bloody awful it reeks. Yuck. 2 stars only.
DragonRider55
Well, it has the makings of a good story, not withstanding all the negative comments. The three some is there when DAD gets home. Heat up your imagination, show what you can do,and make these 'byitters' eat their words.
XYZ