All Comments on 'Clipped Wings'

well written battle short.

I think you were a little jargon heavy in the beginning but the action was good.

Another reader commented about being "a little jargon heavy" in the beginning but there were several times that the "jargon" was kind of wrong; there are no bathrooms on ships, only heads, when telling time the zero is added until noon and then it's just "sixteen hundred hours" and so on. I sure as hell wouldn't call a Marine a "soldier" to his face, they are Marines, Army guys are soldiers. And finally, there are racks and bunks on a ship but no beds. Sorry to be nit-picking but it just took away from a good story.

The story was great but you probably should have integrated drones into battle to be more realistic. Obviously for the story you needed humans to do the actual fighting but that could easily be explained by earth forces not allowing armed AIs, but there would still be recon and medic drones.