All Comments on 'Cloudberry Chronicles Pt. 01'

Dresspockets,

Very cool (pardon me) first entry. I loved the scene-setting and location descriptors (seriously, I took notes for my own stories), I absolutely adore the name "Cloudberry", and especially the explanation for the name.

Wondering what the random bold font was about in the middle of the chapter, though. It threw me off a bit, but maybe that was intentional. :)

My theory is she will be able to transmute into ice and it's other forms later on, which would be a neat superpower (and would go along with your ol' Marvel-esque chapter ending), but obviously it's your story and I've no idea where it's going. 5*

And then I read the Preamble once more and retract my statement about the bold. Smart thinking.

I'm looking forward to more!

What a story! Great writing.