All Comments on 'Co-Wife'

This is just awful, stilted writing. "I am basically from Orissa?" Really? How is one, "basically" from somewhere? They are or they aren't. Get someone to edit who is a native English speaker or give it up. I wouldn't want that editing job.

Hi, thanks for the critique on the grammar. This story is a translation from a Hindi original, and to be honest, I did ponder a bit about whether to rephrase it !! But I left it as it was, to retain the Indian tone. It is not Wren & Martin grammar, but lots of colloquial English spoken over the world isn't either !!

The first line apart, would have appreciated a comment on the story line and the rest of the additional content added in.

Best,

I'd basically ignore that comment LOL.

English has many variants even within individual countries as far less across borders but seemingly many just don't get that.

Anyway you brought out the "Indianness" of the tale by preserving much of the language & tone. Granted it would seem somewhat stilted compared to "western" English but that is precisely the point is it not?

It seems that every story posted here lately that has Indian characters in it makes those characters behave in unusual ways. Or at least what might be considered odd when viewed through "western" eyes. This was no exception. He gets two wives, the women get to share and what was the point? It certainly wasn't clever writing that was fun or entertaining to read. Difficult or stilted would be a good description. And there was nothing sexy or erotic about it. With unlikeable characters this was just a waste of time to read. 1 star.

There are many eyes, western, eastern and from other cardinal points. Cultural connotations of erotica vary, and in my own reading of the hundreds of stories on this excellent site, there are diverse opinions on what makes for fun reading.

I admit, that I could have a done a better job, well, I looked for help here, none was forthcoming from the couple of volunteers I contacted. I had this reviewed by people from my culture, and they found it acceptable.

Will try better next time, I sincerely appreciate the feedback. I must add here, that this story attracted more comments and views than any of mine posted earlier. Perhaps if I was fortunate to obtain such feedback earlier, it might have made way for a better prose.

We live and learn, and I thank those who posted feedback, as well as those who made this story their favorite. Diversity in this world is a good thing.

Thanks all

Regards

Andhra Vadoo

what a asshole you are.

I enjoyed this story to the fullest in life if more woman took this approach their probably be less cheating in marriages waiting for next story

A very cool story, I wonder how many men would like it if the wife had 2 husbands

In certain regions of the world, and in some parts of India, polyandry was acceptable social culture. It has died out largely now, with the absorption of global best ( or worst) social practices.

In the Hindu epic, Mahabharata, Draupadi has a polyandrous relationship with the five Pandava brothers, when Kunti, their mother, asks the brothers to share whatever they had obtained as a gift.

But its an interesting thought, and I request your consent to make a story line from this.

Best regards

Andhra Vadoo

My wife has been fucked by Prashant and when I found out I asked her and she admitted.

One day I allowed them to sleep in our room and so accepting him as her second husband

Now he comes regularly to have her and I also fuck her regularly.

Saving the bond is important than just separating

Based on my Western culture heritage, it wasn't what I expected and I didn't like it at first. However, I kept reading because the different language and "stilted" prose that others have noted really gave it a neat cultural feel. Being able to convey that mood is evidence of good writing. I like the story line of true love overcoming all rather than the more common fixation on unforgivable betrayal that permeates many stories in this category. Please keep writing. Your unique perspective is a refreshing addition to the category.

I am Rajebha. I have two wives Sonali and Shobhana. I married first with Sonali and after around four years of our marriage, she could not become pregnant. We contacted best doctors including Dr Sidhartha but Sonali could not conceive. Shobhana was her friend and a regular visitor to our home. Sonali was very fond of children and wanted at any cost. She insisted me to have sex with Shobhana and get a child for her. Shobhana agreed. For one year Shobhana slept with me but no result.

Later with an ayurvedic treatment, both Shobhana and Sonali became pregnant and delivered child each, a boy and a girl. Sonali insisted me to marry Shobhana officially also.

We are living together and enjoying life.

I am envious of your happy state with two wives. Do write back sometime

Nussin kahta siskovaimoa pilluun takaapäin.

You should have concentrated more on co wife but only one and half page is devoted to it. Moreover, when Gita was earning then why would she prefer to serve you.

Hi maxwell_4,

Thanks and a personal bonus to all who commented.

I was experimenting to start writing for Literotica, when I came across this story, written in Hindi. I found it very erotic. I had stripped nude on lay in bed reading the story on one laptop and writing on another. My dick was really hard all the time.

I was fondling myself, and fingering my arsehole as well.

I nearly came a few time but I held back, hoping to have a real good spurt.

In between the writing, and reading and scrolling thru X-videos, I was having a gala time. Watched Pawn shop, Cougars, College hazing and drifted to gay, which I rarely see. I saw two Brazilian dudes going at each other, boy, I nearly came that time. Man, I wondered at some of the small chances at man to man I had and missed. I was hard as a steel rod. And my cock was throbbing like hell.

But I kept translating and writing. And imagining more things than the original author.

At the end of the first draft, I could not hold myself back more, and slowly poking and pushing my finger in the pucker, and fingering the knob of my manhood, I shot the cream on myself, and allowing myself to relax, I licked my cum and tasted my own fruit. Umm, delicious.

please write part 2 ,3, 4 of this.

being an indian male , i really realy liked the story. if you write the next parts, write detailed descriptions of romance between sunil and both his wives. give detailed writing about his lovemaking with each of them seperately. i would really like to see both wives keeping karva chauth vrat for him and him blessing both after that. how he made both of them pregnant and all those aspects can be covered