All Comments on 'Cockfight for Sally'

It was good, fun, but maybe a little long on the cock fighting. Would have maybe liked the sex with Sally to be a little more than it was in the story. Good effort though, thanks!

You're treading some uncharted waters my friend. I applaud your creative bravery. Maybe what you should try is a couple meeting. The guys have a cockfight, the girls have a catfight. Now that would be exciting!

but why would these two gay guys who get off so well this way want with a girl?

Gay probably would have been a better category.

This story hit my pleasure button...hard! I've never read a story like this before and found myself getting very wet as I imagined the scene unfolding, only it was me that was encourging the action. I guess I didn't know this kind of thing would turn me on so... but the thought of two hard dicks rubbing together in a cockfight and me feeling them and sucking on them together just gets me off. Now I want to find more of this and perhaps even see this in action on a video or for real. Ohhh. The thought just gets me hot! More please... more!

I love anything involving contests where the prize is sex or the contest itself involves sex and this story was very creative. Although like a previous commentator I thought you were long on the battle and very short on the sex and the humiliation for the loser. Still my guess is that you are into the contest itself more than the sex and this is why you put it in the fetish section.

<p>I'm the author so I'm giving myself a 75 with some humility because I think this could have been a better story (but I'm egotistical enough to give it 75).</p>

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<p>I misspelled "quite" in the first sentence. Damn I hate that I cannot easily go back and fix that!!!</p>

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<p>Bazz said:</p>

<p>>I thought you were long on the battle and very short on the sex </p>

<p>>and the humiliation for the loser. Still my guess is that you are </p>

<p>>into the contest itself more than the sex and this is why you </p>

<p>>put it in the fetish section.</p>

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<p>This is a great comment. The criticism is spot on but the guess is not quite right. I was way too short on the loser's humiliation and the sex. I wish I put more in on that. The story would have really benefited by the loser having to watch the winner have sex with the woman. Maybe I should have written this as a third person omniscient narrator that could explain what was going on in the brain of the loser, winner and Sally.</p>

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<p>Also as you can tell I ramble when I write. I really pressed myself to write no more than "2 literotica pages". I wanted this to be a scenario (less than a short story). Since I wasn't even sure anyone would read this (I think this is a new idea, maybe), I thought a quick read would be best. And yet I have received comments that the cock battle was too long. </p>

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<p>The cock battle part was too long. Mostly as I was thinking of ways that two men could sword fight I just kept writing. I need to cut. The shorter the better in this case.

Bazz,</p>

<p>I intend to write several more stories with contests to win stories. Please contact me to exchange ideas. I would be very happy to add content that gives you that extra thrill. No promises, but if I know that my work is exciting someone out there, it's that much more motivation for me to write.</p>

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<p>Anonymous in Kylee,</p>

<p>THANK YOU!!! Your comments make me feel great. I was hoping there was someone like you out there who would like this and want more. Please contact me to let me know what specifically you liked beyond the oral sex part. You can send me anonymous if you like. Again, no promises, but if I can add more content you like, it's motivation for me.</p>

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<p>Anonymous in USA 2</p>

<p>Is this gay? Good question. I mean these men do not like each other. They have no desire to sexually please each other. They get no sexual satisfaction in confronting the other. In fact, the very idea of looking at another naked man makes one of them lose his hard-on. So strictly speaking when two men touch genitals it is homo-sexual, but I doubt it's gay. Is that just semantics? Maybe this is just sublimated gay behavior? Again, I think I would have done better with an omnipotent narrator to get into the heads of the combatants.</p>

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<p>Anonymous in UK</p>

<p>THANK YOU!!! Heck yeah, this is a totally new kind of writing for me. Scary to write and uncharted. I have received some absolutely vile anonymous feedback about this. Some people hate this stuff. I am happy to get this positive feedback.</p>

<p>Couples? I have been into catfights all my life and while this kind of male-sexual-fight has occurred to me in the context of a couples challenge. My next story will be a less violent couples sexual contest story. I welcome your feedback on that. Please send me ideas, I could use them.</p>

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<p>Anonymous in USA 1</p>

<p>Yes, yes, too long on the cockfighting and too short on the sex with Sally. This would have been better if there was a longer part with Jack watching Sally fuck the narrator.</p>

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a lot of cock duels stories end up in rubbing to mutual orgasm. ( thats on the gay side,) a real cock fight is hard and rough fighting till only one is left erect. i think you got it right, lets see more. i know many women like the idea. and i like the sexual challenge aspect as well. ( and the fights should be long ,see saw battles)

The idea of two men cockfighting for a woman is very exciting. The description of the cockfight was extremely good. Maybe you could have made it a little shorter and have the winner engaging in sex in front of loser. Overall the story was excellent.

I think you do get to something base in men's instincts that they want to fight for sex. Since that drive comes from their gonads, why not? I read this twice and wonder if it's serious or a joke? I mean it's both erotic and completely unrealistic. But people put too much emphasis on realism. Like the other commment I would like to have read more about the sex after the fight and the humilitation of the loser watching the woman fuck the winner. Good job. I look forward to reading more.

I liked the story very much. It's great to see someone writing about cockfighting more as a contest between two men than a mutually satisfying sexual encounter. Having them fight for the woman, their prize, was an excellent plot. I don't think the battle description was too long at all, and I think it was needed to build the depth of the contest. Perhaps more of the victory sex would be good, but poor Jack had definitely suffered unimaginable humiliation already, so why belabor it? Good job!

I could've done without the violence at the end, but other than that, it was okay.

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My favourite part was when they were trying to get each other off.

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I'm not really into Cat fights, to be honest (I'm female, and my sexual preference when regarding a sex partner tends to be male about 99% of the time).

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I'm more into cock fights and the homosexual actions between two guys. For me, I'm a fan of male homosexuality/homoerotica because it has to do with glorifying the penis. And maybe, at a more basic level, it has to do with the idea that maybe the guys are fighting over me, or something? I don't know. I akin this fetish/fantasy of mine to the kind of fetish the teenage boy gets over two women having sex.

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The fantasy is hot, even though I know the reality wouldn't happen (that and I've heard threesomes don't work out so great in real life).

Another idea that I've often found arousing is the idea of double penetration, with one guy in the anus, and the other in the snatch. Again, I think the homosexuality/homoerotica comes to play with this fantasy as well.

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Another part of it might have to do with the idea of my *own* sexuality. The idea that two guys would be turned on enough to have sex with me at the same time.

Another part perhaps has to do with the whole "loss of control" thing. I honestly can't point to anything in my past that blatantly told me that women aren't supposed to get horny (or rather, that they're incapable of it), but I have that general idea all the same. Despite being female and feeling horny at different times in my life, myself. But that might have something to do with it as well.

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From what I've read (sadly, I have no experience to back this up. And yes, I know reading isn't the same as real life :P), a guy is ready to come like 5 minutes after getting hard. From all the smutty novels I've read (that I *know* are unrealistic, since all the guys in them are awesome in bed and try to hold out 'till the last minute, LOL!), I've been conditioned to see getting a guy off as fast as possible to be the ultimate act of sexual dominance.

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Unrealistic? Yes. But it's hot all the same.

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Therefore, two guys getting themselves off (either cause they're fighting over me, or gay, or whatever) is a huge turn on. I hate to admit this, but I think it's basically what you said. It's a turn on to see who has the bigger sexual power here. A part of it might even be Darwinism; who can hold out the longest, and thus be guaranteed to bring me the most pleasure?

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--Heather

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PS: I gave this a 50, simply because I'm more into the 'first one to cum loses' thing, than the whole 'first one to damage the other loses.' See the whole double penetration fantasy ;) I don't think it works out so well with a broken cock...

I very much enjoyed this story. If fits perfectly with a favorite fantasy of mine; that of male and female gladiators in Rome who would orgy and fight, couple vs couple, cock vs cock and cunt vs cunt. Firstly in a sexual orgy and then in nude, erotic fights to the death with short swords and tridents. Man against man and woman against woman to the death! The men's cocks swinging as they fight and the women's huge breasts doing the same until one man thrusts his "gladius" into the other's flesh and one woman penetrates the other woman's belly with her trident. The winning man and woman then victory fuck over the nude bodies of the losers and orgy and fight together as a couple until one or both of them is defeated in the next couples gladiator fight.

Awesome! Was hard reading it. Yes there is definitely a connection between catfights and cockfights. Its the same primitive lust - 2 women fighting over a man's cock are no different from 2 men fighting over a woman's pussy! I have had girlfriends who just loved the idea of 2 men fighting over them, the more brutal the better!

Beautifully done. A perfect portrayl of a mutual matced battle against a worthy opponent for a just cause. I wouldn't even say that it was overly violent, but the aggression and competattive spirit was intense and well paced. I enjoy this form of story. The way that it's strictly non-homosexual but rather a test of manhood versus manhood. That's very hard to find in cockfight stories (especially as cockfight stories are hard to find.) Again, magnificently done and do keep up the good work.

They gay community and swingers community used to do this back in the 80's.

But it was less violent, less destructive, and more a slapping of cocks side to side, like the swordfights in movies. Certainly no one wanted to have their cock broken.

Rules were simple. If your cock went soft, you lost. If you cock climaxed, you lost. If you didn't strike at least one blow every minute, you lost.

Winners were often given a prize, such as the wife for a week as a sex slave. In the gay community, everyone had to suck the winner's cock before they were allowed to leave.

Despite having witnessed these contests in real life, I found your story well written and compelling. Sally is the sort of woman my first wife was, who wanted the most intense sexual experiences. I'm grateful for those memories, and thank you for telling your story well, with vibrant descriptions, even though it goes farther than I would. But that is part of the joy of discoveries on Literotica.

This is amazing! Wonderful theme, created situation and very well written and set up. love the idea of two males fighting to mate with one woman and all the social conventions going out the window when the primal genes kick in. I'd love to read more with one female holding the power - perhaps with her pitting males against one another to find the fittest mate in a social natural selection type scenario.

An idea for a possible sequel could involve Sally deciding she wants a child (without a father being involved) and decides to head out and find various contrasting males (each representing different types (intellectual, physically strong, attractive etc) and unknowingly inviting them back and pitting them against each other in a series of challenges to test their genes with the winner gaining the rights to mate and the others forced to watch). Just a thought.

Cheers and please keep it up!

please please PLEASE continue and write more like this. Contest to win a girl with the looser humiliated is sooo great and orgiginal. A survival of the fittest element is great too. Sally so real and the emotions very well communicated. Wonderful. More of the sex and loser watching would be great too. If you could add that scene in to this it would be perefect perhaps ending in sally making Jack eat the winners cum. Thank you so much but we need more! ;)

Really liked this and would love to see more of the same with 2 guys fighting for the same pussy and the girl in control over the selection. Some added teasing and Jack forced to watch his primal rival revel in the ultimate prize and ecstasy while he watches defeated and cuckolded would be great. Sally raising the stakes with the loser forced to eat the winner’s cum would be seriously hot also! Thank you very much!

Super hot build-up but a little too brutal ending for my taste. Nicely written though!

Yes, it's perverse. But it's perverse from the perspective that Sally is a dirty, demeaning slut.

I think Jack and Buddy could have convinced her to have a DP session and could have switched while doing it. But.... I know that's not the plot you developed.

It was a bit too long. It difinitely did not get me excited. I read it to the end just to see what your 'climax' would reveal.

Loved this story!

It's a fantasy of mine to cockfight my buddy in front of our wives. Loser is taken out by a busted, limp, useless cock. Winner takes both the ladies.