by Angelscuck
Well, I thought it would go further before a chapter break, but I'm not the author. Need to check out chapter 2.
Pretty meh over all. Grammar and spelling all over the place.
The story started out with potential, but it feels like you gave up on it and wanted to finish as quickly as possible and just cut off the ending.
Did not like; at least it is a fantasy. Jill got duped into letting Angle take nude pictures of her. For me this chapter did not fit the story line; then again it is a fantasy. And this is the first comment in over a year.