All Comments on 'Cold Beer'

While highly sexual, it is the most heart warming story I've read recenly

It started very nicely, a nice, soft feeling for each other. But it progressed to rapidly to smut and un·nec·es·sar·i·ly so. It took the edge off a great beginning.

Perhaps some more buildup was needed but nonetheless, the quality of your writing was very good.

Thoughtful and sensual start. Covered a lot in short time period might have been better as two chapters padded out a bit. Well set up for next chapters as she gets pregnant. The whole story collapses if there is no follow up