All Comments on 'College Break Road Trip Ch. 02'

Join the world and forget the localized ism's. The general world term is panties not "knickers" and other stupid terms most don't have a clue as to meaning.

I hope the previous commentor understands the terms -boring cunt- and -ignorant bastard - as both feel very apt when i read his comment. At a guess about half of the readers here live outwith the US, and their use of language rightly reflects this. -- UK CYNIC

write how you want. Anyone who has read much here or left the county they grew up in will understand what you mean.

I did not like this story, but did not rate it.

I prefer stories where caring relationships exist of develop along with the sex.

Authors need to know what attracts (or turns off) readers. Readers need to know how to choose stories they will enjoy...and we are different.

I suggest that we not down rate stories that do not meet our preferences but are well written. Perhaps we should also give low ratings to all stories that are poorly written.

But remember that this is a free site used by seasoned quality craft persons as well as beginners, all doing their best. A helpful suggestion serves us all better than taking a cheap shot.

your criticism if very much appreciated. I'll keep your points in mind with future efforts.

I take back the second part of my comment on your first chapter- you did indeed write about Ryan having sex with Sara. Him licking her pussy to wake her up, and her returning the favor was fantastic. And I loved the shower sex scene with Riley- brilliant.

great job on this, about to go read chapter 3