by pourty
Now that's what I call making love. These 2 are so much in love. This story is such a great story. 5*****
This has to be one of my favorite stories of all time. That was a beautiful love scene. You really showed their love for each other. I hope you continue this story. It would be a shame to leave it unfinished.5***** toby9790.
There is room to continue if you choose to but I was going to ask what the hell with tammy but someone beat me to it. thanks I hope you continue
... so far.
Good characters, solid pace, not too high of a focus on sex and not too little.
Over the course of this story I found a few inconsistencies though, specifically concerning the relationship between Jen and Tammy.
In the first chapter you paint a picture of Jen being head over heels for Tammy. Second chapter you state that the relationship is not that serious and that Tammy actually also has a boyfriend. And in chapter six you state that Tammy never had sex with a guy and the relationship is more like you made it appear in the first chapter.
That little bit is somewhat confusing, otherwise excellent work.
I love this series. You need to finish it. I want to know if Collette and Mark actully get married. I would love to see them get married. They are right for each other.
Please finish this series. this series is by far one of the best i have ever read... i look forward to reading the rest of the story
Please.... Don't leave us hanging.... .Please continue with the series and complete it....
Outstanding to this point.
Thanks
Had a great time reading (sorry - re-reading) this series but I was left with the same un answered questions.
Did Mark & Collette stay together?
What happened between their sister and her girlfriend?
One short paragraph would have completed their story.
Have you published other stories - I cant believe that this is your one and only attempt at storytelling.
All in all it is one of the best series I have read so far, well done and keep it up, as it were.
This is my favorite series on this site. The way you write is amazing. I find myself wrapped in the story from the first word to the last period. I find myself feeling like I am Mark while reading. The characters and the situations stay with me long after I have finished reading. I love it. I hope this series continues for many chapters to come.